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One_Stone

please correct my writting

Beitrag von One_Stone »

Hi @ all,

it would be very nice, if you helped me.
My homework is to write a letter of application and I'm not sure about the syntax.
Thanks in advance!

Dear Sir or Madam,
I’m writing to you to apply for a practical training in your company.

At present I am attending the Erasmus-Gymnasium in Rostock. I will take my A-levels in July 2008 and would like to begin training thereafter.

It is important to me getting this training because I want start studying engineering at the university in Rostock and it includes two month practical training with a company. Making it for a company with international connections like yours would be ideal in improving my career prospects.

I am keen to take up the profession of aeronautical engineer as I am very interested in technology, design and development of aircraft. Also, solving issues that arise during the development is a welcome challenge for me.

I have a good command of written and spoken English, therefore language shouldn’t be a problem during the time.

I would be very pleased to be invited for an interview.

sandmann

Beitrag von sandmann »

Hi @ all,

it would be very nice to help me.
My homework is to write a letter of application and I'm not sure about the syntax.
Thanks in advance!

Dear Sir/Madam,
I’m writing to you to apply for a practical training in your company.

At present I am attending the Erasmus-Gymnasium in Rostock. I will take my A-levels in July 2008 and would like to begin training thereafter.

It is important to me to get this training because I would like to start studying ( or I am going to be start studying ) engineering at the university in Rostock and it also includes two month practical training in a company. In order to improve my career prospects it would be ideal to me to get the chance to do it in your company having international connections.

I am realy keen to take up the profession of aeronautical engineer because I am very interested in technology, design and development of aircrafts. Also, solving issues that arise during the development is a welcome challenge for me.

I have a good command of written and spoken English, therefore language shouldn’t be a problem during this time.

I would be very pleased to be invited for an interview.


Hope it helps.