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Korrektur lesen bitte

Beitrag von MrsS »

Hallo erstmal :spin:

Ich weiß der Text ist etwas länger, aber könnte jemand trotzdem mal korrektur lesen bitte. Ich glaube ich hab noch einiges übersehen. :roll:


Trainspotting is a movie from the year 1996 directed by Danny Boyle, based on the novel Trainspotting by Irvine Welsh.

The movie is about a group of heroin-addict-friends, who live in Edinburgh.
Ewan McGregor who plays the main character, his name is Renton, is taking heroin but he also wants to stop and he often tried it, but he just can't.
His friends characters are also very interesting. There is Spud who is kind of a follower of the group, for example when Renton gave him ecstasy before his jobinterview.

And there is also Sick-boy. You could say that he is the most intellectuel one and he is not as addicted as the others are, because when renton tried so get clean Sick-boy also stopped taking heroin but just to annoy Renton and then there is Francis Begbie who doesn't take illegal drugs but he's an alcoholic and he is also very aggressive, he often starts fights even with his friends.

Renton met a girl in the disco .They slept with each other but she just told him later that she's 16 and that is illegal in Scotland. Then he said that he don't want to meet her anymore but she wanted to see him again so she said she would go to the police.
The last member of the group is Tommy who dislikes drugs, but at the end of the movie he dies of the consequences of drugs.

Now the actual act of the movie.
Renton and Spud had to appear in court because of drug abuse. He got acquitted but Spud had to go to jail.
And after he was clean he decided to go to London .He found a job there and he forgot about the drugs. But then his friend Spud, Sick-boy and later Begby visited him and they just stayed in his apartment.
They sold heroin for 16.000 pound.
But Renton decided to steal the bag with the money while the others slept. And that was the end of the movie.
On one side it shows how drugs can destroy your life and the life of others. In the movie Sick-boy and a girl which also lived with him had a baby. And it died because they just forgot about it, they don't even heared it screaming, because the were full of heroin and the effect of heroin lasts long.

And on the other side renton and his friends never were unhappy with their situation. The movie shows the situation how it was in Scotland at the end of the 80ies and that the society was just broken up .

You can't really say that the are friends because they did all those bad things to each other, but that is typical for that movie. At the end even renton forgot about his principles, because he chose the money, which is part of the life he was against at the beginning of the movie.



And the reasons? There are no reasons. Who needs reasons when you've got heroin? :wink1:

maureencc

Re: Korrektur lesen bitte

Beitrag von maureencc »

Trainspotting is a movie from the year 1996 directed by Danny Boyle, based on the novel Trainspotting by Irvine Welsh.

The movie is about a group of heroin-addicted friends who live in Edinburgh.
Ewan McGregor, who plays the main character, his name is Renton, takes heroin but he also wants to stop and he has often tried to, but he just can't.

His friends' characters are also very interesting. There is Spud who is kind of a follower of the group, for example when Renton gave him ecstasy before his job interview.

And there is also Sick-boy. You could say that he is the most intellectual one and he is not as addicted as the others are, because when Renton tries to get clean Sick-boy also stops taking heroin but just to annoy Renton and then there is Francis Begbie who doesn't take illegal drugs but he's an alcoholic and he is also very aggressive. He often starts fights even with his friends.

Renton meets a girl in the disco. They sleep with each other but she just tells him later that she's 16 and that is illegal in Scotland. Then he says that he doesn't want to meet her anymore but she wants to see him again so she says that she is going to go to the police.
The last member of the group is Tommy who dislikes drugs, but at the end of the movie he dies of the consequences of drugs.

Now the actual act of the movie. ?? (plot - Handlung?)
Renton and Spud have to appear in court because of drug abuse. He gets acquitted but Spud has to go to jail.
And after he is clean he decides to go to London. He finds a job there and he forgets about the drugs. But then his friends Spud, Sick-boy and later Begby visit him and they just stay in his apartment.
They sell heroin for 16.000 pounds.
But Renton decides to steal the bag with the money while the others are asleep. And that is the end of the movie.
On the one hand it shows how drugs can destroy your life and the life of others. In the movie Sick-boy and a girl who also lives with him have a baby. And it dies because they just forget about it, they don't even hear it screaming because they are full of heroin and the effect of heroin lasts for a long time.

And on the other hand Renton and his friends are never unhappy with their situation. The movie shows the situation in Scotland at the end of the 80s and that society was just broken up .

You can't really say that they are friends because they have done all those bad things to each other, but that is typical for this movie. At the end even Renton forgets about his principles, because he chooses the money which is part of the life he was against at the beginning of the movie.



And the reasons? There are no reasons. Who needs reasons when you've got heroin? :wink1:




Ich habe dir einiges korrigiert. Achte doch bitte darauf, wenn du so einen Text schreibst, dass er in der Gegenwart geschrieben wird. Wenn du dann dich auf etwas Vergangenes beziehen willst, musst du Present Perfect benutzen. Flüchtigkeitsfehler wie Großschreibung bei Namen oder 's' bei dritter Person und das richtige Relativpronomen (bei Personen WHO) dürfen nicht sein. Mache doch eine Liste dieser typischen Fehler und überprüfe deine Texte konsequent.

Viel Erfolg!

Maureencc

MrsS

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Danke

Ich werde versuchen, deine Tipps beim nächsten Mal zu berücksichtigen. Die Fehler mache ich leider immer wieder.