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elriwa

Korrektur meines englischen Textes

Beitrag von elriwa »

Hallo, schreibe übermorgen eine Englischarbeit und ich bräuchte Hilfe bei de Korrektur meines Englischtextes. Es ist sehr wichtig, da ich nicht gerade eine gute Englischnote habe. Sind bestimmt Ausdruck(Grammtikfehler drin :(
Fall nochjemand andere/bessere Argumente hat, wäre nicht schlecht. danke schonmal an alle, die sich die Mühe machen, das nachzusehen.

Hier mein Text:

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What are advantage and disadvantages of shopping on the internet? Page 79

Advantages:
People can buy around the clock. They don’t have to leave their house and they can do shopping from home.
Almost all goods are sold also via the Internet now.
Banking transaction can be settled comfortably from at home.
The ordered goods are home supplied.

Disadvantages:
For business on the spot the sales volume drops because the people always buy more on the Internet.
If ordered goods are delivered, the people often aren't at home.
This delays the delivery.
It must be ensured thus that someone is at home, in order orders those goods to receive.
In the end I would like to say that also credit card fraud and account fraud in the Internet increase.


Nr. 4
In what way is the consumer protected against advertising and spending money? (p. 86)

Consumers can be protected only if there are laws, which protect the consumers.
Advertisement promises more than it holds. Humans buy goods and are disappointed if they are supplied.
A law (1977) in England gave consumers the right to get their money back in full, if they had no receipt.

Nr. 3
What qualities should an applicant for Camp Florida have? And how could an applicant benefit from it? (page 85)

Camp Florida is a job agency that finds suitable young people from all over the world to work in American summer camps for nine weeks.
- They must have the following qualities:
- They must be able to deal well with children and other humans.
- They must be loadable, because the work is arduous.
- They must be ready for cooking and cleaning.
- They must be ready to become acquainted with the culture of a strange country.
The applicants have the chance to learn there much. They increase their self-assurance and personal independence. That are qualities who employers acres always looking for.
The costs of the flight from Germany are taken over. The applicants receive a generous pocket money and after the Camp they can still 6 weeks in the USA and in Canada remain.

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6. What are pros and what are cons of globalization? Who are winners and who are losers? (cf. pages 88, 91)

The individual markets of the world grow together to a large market.
For the enterprises globalization is naturally also a benediction. It is now possible for them to get raw materials from all over the world and that to favourable prices. The advantages are the many shorter transportation times contrary to in former times.
The winners are the large companies
The losers are the employees in the large industrial nations.
In addition, the losers are the employees in the cheap wage countries, because they are used. They get a low payment.

boert

Beitrag von boert »

Nr. 1:
What are advantage and disadvantages of shopping on the internet? Page 79

Advantages:
People can buy around the clock. They don’t have to leave their house and they can do shopping from home.
Meanwhile, almost all goods are sold also via over the Internet now.
Banking transaction can be settled comfortably from at home.
The ordered goods are home supplied.

Disadvantages:
For business on the spot the sales volume drops because the people always buy more on the Internet.
If ordered goods are delivered, the people often aren't at home.
This delays the delivery.
It must be ensured thus that someone is at home,in order orders those goods to receive these goods.
In the end I would like to say that also credit card fraud and account fraud in the Internet increase.


Nr. 4
In what way is the consumer protected against advertising and spending money? (p. 86)

Consumers can be protected only if there are laws, which protect the consumers.
Advertisement promises more than it holds. Humans People buy goods and are may be disappointed if when they are supplied.
A law (1977) in England gave gives consumers the right to get their money back in full, even if they had ve no receipt.

Nr. 3
What qualities should an applicant for Camp Florida have? And how could an applicant benefit from it? (page 85)

Camp Florida is a job agency that finds gives suitable young people from all over the world the chance to work in American summer camps for nine weeks.
- They Volunteers must have the following qualities:
- They must be able to deal well with children and other humans people.
- They must be loadable, because the work is arduous.
- They must be ready for cooking and cleaning.
- They must be ready to become acquainted with the culture of a strange country.
The applicants have the chance to learn much there much. They increase their self-assurance and personal independence. That are qualities who employers acres always are looking for.
The costs of the flight from Germany are taken over are paid by the organization. The applicants receive a generous pocket money and after the Camp they can still stay 6 weeks in the USA and in Canada remain for another 6 weeks.

Nr. 6
6. What are pros and what are cons of globalization? Who are winners and who are losers? (cf. pages 88, 91)

The individual markets of the world grow together to a one large market.
For the enterprises globalization is naturally also a benediction. It is now possible for them to get raw materials from all over the world and that to - for favourable prices. The advantages are the many much shorter transportation times contrary to in former times.
The winners are the large big companies
The losers are the employees in the large industrial nations.
In addition, the losers are the employees in the cheap wage countries, because they are used. They get a low payment.

elriwa

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Beitrag von elriwa »

Hallo das ist ganz lieb vielen Dank für die schnelle Hilfe. Damit hätte ich nicht gerechnet, dass das so schnell geht. *dickerkussgeb*

Würde noch jemand diesen Text hier nachsehen?

Nr. 7
If you lived in the small town, of Stroud, what service/ product could you offer?

When I would live in this small town, I could offer babysitting or sitting for older people. I could also advertise myself for helping people with lawn mowing or hedge cutting. Conceivable would also be to offer my help for doing housework. Another service would come up to me last: I could go walking with elderly people, so that they have an entertainment and I could offer a service for buying.

*Im letzten Satz möchte ich sagen, dass ich halt so was anbieten könnte wie ein Einkaufsservice für ältere Leute.

ganz lieben Dank an den/die Helfer.

lg

Culturist

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Beitrag von Culturist »

Nr. 7
If you lived in the small town, of Stroud, what service/ product could you offer?

When I would live in this small town, I could offer babysitting or sitting for older people. I could also advertise myself for helping people with lawn mowing or hedge cutting. Conceivable would also be to offer my help for doing housework. Another service would come up to me last: I could go walking with elderly people, so that they have an entertainment and I could offer a service for buying.

*Im letzten Satz möchte ich sagen, dass ich halt so was anbieten könnte wie ein Einkaufsservice für ältere Leute.

ganz lieben Dank an den/die Helfer.

Nr. 7
If you lived in the small town of Stroud, what service/ product could you offer?

If I lived in Stroud, I would, anyway, offer the following tow services: babysitting or sitting for older people(?).
Furthermore, on request, I would offer to help in either lawn mowing or hedge cutting. Just as possibly, I could offer pupils my help in doing his or her homework. However, the least acceptable thing for me would (definitively) be to go shopping or for a walk with older people - neither for any kind of assistance in shopping nor for their amusement only, or for whatever such reasons.




lg