Hi leude!!
Wäret ihr so nett und schaut mal über diesen Text.
Falls ihr Fehler seht wäre es nett wenn ihr sie mir mitteilt.
Molly is a computer system which should help people to facilitate their lifestyle.
It tells you when you have to wake up and if you go into your kitchen Molly cognize it and makes turning your coffeespot itself on.
During breakfast Molly plays your favourite music and prints out the newspaper by scanning the internet.
If your products in the your fridge are run out of date or something important like milk isn´t in it, molly tells you this.
While travel by car Molly shows you the fastest way to your destination.
Andy if on the street is a lot of trouble it tells you an alternative route.
It protect you against accidents and when you are ill Molly can transform itself to a virtual doctor who can analyse yourself.
And if you are going for example to a party Molly will remind you who each people is.
After party, if you are drunken , Molly will bar you to drive with your car.
Molly shows you a virtual shopping mall where you can buy when you want and what you want.
Correction of a text
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SigiZ
Molly is a computer system which shall help people to facilitate their lifestyle.
It tells you when you have to wake up and when you go into your kitchen Molly recognizes it and turns your percolator on.
During breakfast Molly plays your favourite music and prints out the newspaper by scanning the internet.
If the products in your fridge are running out of date or something important like milk is missing ,Molly tells you this.
While travelling by car Molly shows you the fastest way to your destination.
And if there is a traffic jam, Molly tells you an alternative route.
The system protects you against accidents and when you are ill Molly can transform itself to a virtual doctor who can examine you.
If you are going for example to a party Molly will remind you who everyone people is.
After the party, if you are drunken , Molly will bar you to drive with your car.
Molly shows you a virtual shopping mall where you can buy when you want and what you want.
Ein paar Sachen hab ich so stehen gelassen, weil ich mir nicht sicher bin, ob ich dich richtig versteh. Ist das eine Hausaufgabe? Der text ist ein bisschen unstrukturiert....also Eileitung ist noch ok...aber dann zählst du nur noch auf, ohne system ohne Überleitungen und mit "AND" am Satzanfang. Das ist nicht so schön.
Ich fänds interessant, wenn du teilweise versuchen würdest näher zu erklären, wie Molly die Dinge tut, die sie tut...z.B. vor Unfällen schützen.
Aber ne nette Idee
It tells you when you have to wake up and when you go into your kitchen Molly recognizes it and turns your percolator on.
During breakfast Molly plays your favourite music and prints out the newspaper by scanning the internet.
If the products in your fridge are running out of date or something important like milk is missing ,Molly tells you this.
While travelling by car Molly shows you the fastest way to your destination.
And if there is a traffic jam, Molly tells you an alternative route.
The system protects you against accidents and when you are ill Molly can transform itself to a virtual doctor who can examine you.
If you are going for example to a party Molly will remind you who everyone people is.
After the party, if you are drunken , Molly will bar you to drive with your car.
Molly shows you a virtual shopping mall where you can buy when you want and what you want.
Ein paar Sachen hab ich so stehen gelassen, weil ich mir nicht sicher bin, ob ich dich richtig versteh. Ist das eine Hausaufgabe? Der text ist ein bisschen unstrukturiert....also Eileitung ist noch ok...aber dann zählst du nur noch auf, ohne system ohne Überleitungen und mit "AND" am Satzanfang. Das ist nicht so schön.
Ich fänds interessant, wenn du teilweise versuchen würdest näher zu erklären, wie Molly die Dinge tut, die sie tut...z.B. vor Unfällen schützen.
Aber ne nette Idee