Summary "You should have seen the mess" (Korrektur

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Guten Abend alle zusammen, hab eben ein summary geschrieben bitte mal die Fehler korrigieren und sonst etwas entfernen was nicht dazugehören sollte.

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The text is about Lorna a girl who is obsessed by dirt and untidiness.
She criticize all buildings, that aren't spotless.

She is seventeen years old and have her certificate, therefore she have her first job in a solicitor's office.
At the first day she recognize all the mess, no floor covering, everywhere dusty, cracked cups.
For this reason she leave this office, cause she and her parents decide this.
The flat of her family was very spotless, because the mother pay attention very much.
On a day, Lorna has to go to the doctor's house to fetch a prescription, during she is waiting in the
living room she notice the mess house, which doesn't appeal to her.
A day Dr. Darby from the Doctor's house asks her, if she want to do a picnic with them.
She doesn't like the mess of this family, indeed she likes them.
But she doesn't say willingly, that the Darby family is like the Leary family, which is evicted by the Council from their block, in the reason that they are far from houseproud.

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Ahja bräuche die Korrektur bis Montag wär echt nett

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he text is about Lorna a girl who is obsessed by dirt and untidiness.
She criticize all buildings, that aren't spotless.

[Reine Verständnisfrage meinerseits: Sie ist besessen von Dreck und Unordentlichkeit und sie kritisiert Gebäude mit Mängeln? Abgesehen davon, dass das ein etwas ungewöhnliches Hobby ist: Bist du sicher?]

She is seventeen years old and have [he, she,it... - Bitte im ganzen Text, ich markiers hier nur einmal, sonst wirds unübersichtlich] her certificate, therefore she have her first job in a solicitor's office.

At the first day she recognize all the mess, no floor covering, everywhere dusty, cracked cups. the missing floor covering, the dust, the cracked cups.
For this reason she leave this office, cause she and her parents decide this. [Formuliers um, klingt nicht]
The flat of h Her familys flat was [Zeit?] very spotless, because the mother pay attention very much. [Unverständlich]
On a One day, Lorna has to go to the doctor's house to fetch a prescription, during and while she is waiting in the
living room she notice all the mess in the house, which and that doesn't appeal to her. [Formulier es um]
AOne [Wiederholung] day Dr. Darby from the Doctor's house asks her, if she want to do a picnic with them him and his family.
She doesn't like the mess of this family [Formulierung], indeed even if she likes them.
But she doesn't say willingly, that the Darby family is like the Leary family, which is evicted by the Council from their block, in the reason that they are far from houseproud.

Nicht wirklich Englisch.