Kann mir jemand helfen!!??

[YASUKATAKAYA]

Hallo,
kann mir jemand bitte helfen denn folgenden Text zu überprüfen, ob dieser irgendwelche Fehler aufweist?!

My name is ...... and I´m 23 years old. Originally I´m from ........, but since the age of 11 I have been living in Germany. Nowadays I live in ........... I´m not married, I have only a girlfriend. I like playing volleyball. When I have come to Germany, I attended first the elementary school, then I attended the secondary school which I changed and went to the secondary modern school in ......... To be able to study, I still had to do the vocational baccalaureat diploma, in addition I attended the school in ........ for economy and management. I have one sister. I live with my parents in our big house, but soon I will move to my girlfriend and begin my own life.

Vielen Dank im Voraus und eine lieben Gruss!!!

[Greg]

My name is ...... and I´m 23 years old. Originally I´m from ........, but since the age of 11 I have been living in Germany. Nowadays I live in ........... I´m not married, I only have a girlfriend. I like playing volleyball. When I came to Germany, I first attended Elementary School, then I went to secondary school which I left for secondary modern school (Keine Ahnung welche Schulart das ist)in ......... To be able to study, I still had to get a vocational baccalaureat diploma. In addition I attended the school in ........ for economy and management. I have one sister. I live with my parents in our big (...pass auf, wem Du das schreibst) house, but soon I will move in with my girlfriend and start my own life.