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icegirl

Hilfe für eine Korrektur meines Textes

Beitrag von icegirl »

hi :wink: ,

ich hoffe hier kann mir jemand schnell und gut helfen. ich hab da so probleme mit den zeiten und grammatikalisch.

A new fish was introduced into Lake Victoria in africa. The Nile Perch, a vocarios predator, were exterminated the native fish species. It was nothing undertaken agaist this mass dying of the fish, because the sales of the Nile Perch are profitable. But only few people profit, while the population around the Lake live in poverty and suffer under absolutely inhuman conditions. Although they supply finest fish fillets to Europe or Asia. Airplanes come to Africa to take the fillets. They bring weapons for the civil war instead of importing auxiliary goods and food. The african people and their children eat fish bones and the head. To get money many women prostitute and in Africa many people have HIV. Fishermen use the prostitution and die under the HIV. Even priests don't advise to use condoms for their protection, because god rule is a sin. They let people get sick and die. The AIDS rate in Africa is very high. Also the lake is pollute of chemicals. The government in africa and the other countries don't care about this and see away.

Ich bedanke mich im Voraus für eure Hilfe.

boert

Beitrag von boert »

A new fish was introduced (Let me introduce myself: I'm boert :wink: . Such mal nach einem anderen Ausdruck, "vorstellen" trifft es nicht wirklich in diesem Zusammenhang. Vielleicht "brought in" ) into Lake Victoria in africa.

The Nile Perch, a vocarios predator, were exterminated the native existingfish species.

It was Nothing was undertaken agaist this mass dying of the fish, because the sales of the selling Nile Perch are is profitable (for?).

But only a few people profit, while the population people around the Lake live in poverty and suffer under absolutely inhuman conditions.
Although they supply finest fish fillets to Europe or Asia. Airplanes come to Africa to takeexport the fillets.
In return they bring weapons for the civil war instead of importing auxiliary goods and food.
The african people and their children are compelled to eat fish bones and the -heads.
To get earn money many women prostitute and in Africa many people have HIV are HIV-postive (Du bist entweder HIV positiv oder hast AIDS. HIV kann man nicht "haben". Nur so zum Verständnis.).

Fishermen make use of the womens awkward situation use the prostitution and die under the HIV of AIDS.
Even priests don't advise the people to use condoms for theirprotection, because gods rule is a sin. They let people get sick and die.
The AIDS rate in Africa is very high. Also the lake is polluted of by chemicals. But the government in africa and the other countries don't care about this and see away.
Zuletzt geändert von boert am 12. Nov 2006 12:51, insgesamt 1-mal geändert.

icegirl

Beitrag von icegirl »

ohhh ha bin ich platt...
erstmal vielen vielen dank boert für deine schnelle hilfe :freu:
und ich bin grad überrascht wie viele fehler ich habe :( hät es ehrlich gesagt nicht erwartet :wink:
noch mal ein dickes danke schön :mrgreen:

icegirl

Beitrag von icegirl »

beim überlesen stolpere ich immer über "make use of the womens akward situation" und ich find das wort akward nicht im duden und kann mir nichts reimen, was das bedeuten sollte?

danke schon mal :jo:

boert

Beitrag von boert »

Hi,

1. : Bitte bitte :wink:
2. : "awkward situation" lässt sich wohl am besten mit "missliche Lage" übersetzen. Hatte ein "W" vergessen, deswegen hast du wohl nichts gefunden. Sorry.
Zuletzt geändert von boert am 12. Nov 2006 13:51, insgesamt 1-mal geändert.

icegirl

Beitrag von icegirl »

du bist :angel: :mrgreen: