Correction of my text... Please Help! I need it tomorrow

[extreme]

I read a book and now i must write a characterisation of 2 people. (The two following texts)
I need help because i think that some sentences are wrong (grammar).

Here are the texts

Break-in / Break-out
(Willy Russel and Eric Paice)
Characterisation of “Macka“

Brian McDonald (his nickname is Macka) is a schoolboy, who is 16 years old. His school friends are Joseph White and Alan Hughes. Macka is the leader of the three boys and he is very unfriendly to other kids, for example he robbed a ball off some little kids. He is angry, because the caretaker gives him not the ball and he is stubbornly, because Macka want to get the ball of Dixie, the caretaker. The moreover Macka insult very often the caretaker of the school. When Dixie went into the building, Brian McDonald was very angry and he would break the door down. He don’t think about what can happen after the break-in. Sometimes he doesn’t understand jokes of himself. But he is a loner. Macka will go to sea with the “Royal”.
Finally he is brave, because he wants to break into the school and he wants to go to the “Royal”. So he orders the other two boys to help him for the break-in and if somebody don’t want he will never hang out with a friend.

the next text :
Break-in / Break-out
(Willy Russell and Eric Paice)
Characterisation of “Snowy”

Snowy (Joseph White) is a schoolboy, who is 16 years old. He is a member of Macka’s gang. At the first he fells innocent, because he thinks that he can play football in the school during the vacations. In addition he is a funny person, who makes jokes. Sometimes he is upset and he obeys his leader of this gang. But he criticizes some people of this group. He organizes his life after the school, because he knows that he going on the dole. On the other hand he don’t understand the jokes of his friends and he insult a friend.


Thanks for your greating help!

extreme!

[boert]

Hi,

ich hab zwar keine Ahnung, über was du da schreiben musstest und stellenweise auch nicht, was du eigentlich ausdrücken möchtest, aber die gröbsten Grammatikfehler dürften raus sein.

Brian McDonald (his nickname is Macka) is a 16 year old schoolboy. His school friends are Joseph White and Alan Hughes.
Macka is the leader of the three boys and he is very unfriendly to other kids, for example he robbed a ball off some little kids.
He is angry, because the caretaker doesn’t(?) give him the ball and he is stubbornly, because Macka wants to get the ball from Dixie, the caretaker.

Moreover Macka very often insults the caretaker of the school. When Dixie went (Zeitsprung?) into the building, Brian McDonald was very angry and he would break the door down. He doesn’t think about what can happen after the break-in. Sometimes he doesn’t understand jokes of himself. But he is a loner. Macka will go to sea with the “Royal”.
Finally he is brave (sicher?), because he wants to break into the school and he wants to go to the “Royal”. So he orders the other two boys to help him with the break-in and if somebody "don’t want he will never hang out with a friend". <----?

the next text :
Break-in / Break-out
(Willy Russell and Eric Paice)
Characterisation of “Snowy”

Snowy (Joseph White) is a 16 year old schoolboy.
He is a member of Macka’s gang. At first he feels innocent, because he thinks that he can play football in the school during the vacations. Additionally he is a funny person, who makes jokes. Sometimes he is upset and he obeys the leader of this gang. But he criticizes some people of this group. He organizes his life after the school, because he knows that he (...) going on the dole. On the other hand he doesn’t understand his friends jokes and he insults a friend.