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Hallo Zusammen, ich muss ein Kommentar (250+ Wörter) über einen Artikel (A Life in the Day:...) schreiben. Kann mir bitte jemand das Kommentar Korrekturlesen bzw. Anregungen zur Änderung geben? Danke :) lg Bani
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The article „Life in the Day: Lorrie Bowen” talks about Lorrie Bowen who is a 29-year-old surgical doctor who has worked in the Arctic for 18 months. Her responsibilities are medical care and waste management.
As a medical practitioner, she deals with basic illnesses like coughs and scratches. Also, she decides if people can stay or have to leave the Arctic in case of medical issues. If she has the possibility to work outside, she takes it, because inside it's hot and full of static. When she is outside, she paints signs, marks safe areas, helps to build weather stations, or joins the scientists. I also like this type of varied work, and I would do the same. For me, the best place to work is outside, and I love staying in contact with nature.
 For Lorrie, living in the Arctic is a good experience and an adventure. She stays in touch with magical natural happenings, but she has to live in the conditions of the arctic environment. In summer, there are 24 hours of light, and she has to share her room with up to 100 persons. In wintertime, she has to eat tinned or dried food; fresh food is available only in summer. All these facts show that the Arctic is a place where you can discover beautiful things, but it is still a dangerous place to be. I could imagine such an experience. In a nutshell, if I got this kind of opportunity, I would take it and go for an arctic trip, with all of its pros and cons.

Keswick (Contributor)

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Bani hat geschrieben:Hallo Zusammen, ich muss ein Kommentar (250+ Wörter) über einen Artikel (A Life in the Day:...) schreiben. Kann mir bitte jemand das Kommentar Korrekturlesen bzw. Anregungen zur Änderung geben? Danke :) lg Bani
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The article „Life in the Day: Lorrie Bowen” deals with Lorrie Bowen, who is a 29-year-old surgical doctor who has been working in the Arctic for 18 months. (ich gehe davon aus, dass sie immer noch dort arbeitet?) Her responsibilities are (ich faende hier "cover" statt "are" nicht schlecht, aber "are" ist absolut richtig) medical care and waste management.

As a medical practitioner, she deals with basic illnesses such as coughs and scratches (meinst du hier wirklich nur Kratzer?) . Also, she decides if people are allowed to stay or if they have to leave the Arctic in case of medical issues. If she has the option to work outside, she takes it, because inside it's hot and full of static (was meinst du hier genau?). When she is outside, she paints signs, marks safe areas, helps to build weather stations, or joins the scientists. I also like this type of varied work, and I would do the same. For me, the best place to work is outside, and I love staying in touch with nature.

For Lorrie, living in the Arctic is a good experience and an adventure. She stays in touch with magical natural happenings (ich faende hier "events" besser, aber "happenings ist auch in Ordnung), but she has to live in the conditions of the Arctic environment. During the summer, the Arctic has 24 hours of daylight, and she has to share her room with up to 100 people. During the winter, she has to eat tinned or dried food; fresh food is available only in the summer. All these facts show that the Arctic is a place where you can discover beautiful things, but it is still a dangerous place to be. I could imagine such an experience. In a nutshell, if I had this kind of opportunity, I would take it and go for an Arctic trip, with all of its pros and cons.
Hallo,

ich hoffe ich habe alles gefunden :)

VG
Keswick

Alyssea

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Keswick hat geschrieben:
Bani hat geschrieben: The article "Life in the Day: Lorrie Bowen” is about Lorrie Bowen, who is a 29-year-old surgical doctor who has been working in the Arctic for 18 months. (ich gehe davon aus, dass sie immer noch dort arbeitet?) Her responsibilities are (ich faende hier "cover" statt "are" nicht schlecht, aber "are" ist absolut richtig) medical care and waste management.

As a medical practitioner, she deals with basic illnesses such as coughs and scratches (meinst du hier wirklich nur Kratzer?) . She also decides if people are allowed to stay or if they have to leave the Arctic because of medical issues. If she has the opportunity to work outside, she takes it, because inside it's hot and unchanging (was meinst du hier genau?). When she is outside, she paints signs, marks safe areas, helps to build weather stations, or joins the scientists. I'm also fond of this type of varied work, and I would do the same. For me, the best place to work is outside, as I love staying in touch with nature.

For Lorrie, living in the Arctic is a good experience and an adventure. She's surrounded by magical natural happenings (ich faende hier "events" besser, aber "happenings ist auch in Ordnung), but she has to live in the conditions of the Arctic environment. During the summer, the Arctic has 24 hours of daylight, and she has to share her room with up to 100 people. In the winter, she has to eat tinned or dried food; fresh food is available only in the summer. All of this proves that the Arctic is a place where you can discover beautiful things, but is still a dangerous place to be. I could imagine going on such an experience, myself. In a nutshell, if I had this kind of opportunity, I would take it and go on an Arctic trip, with all of its pros and cons.
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