Personal Introduction- Korrekturlesen

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anonym12

Personal Introduction- Korrekturlesen

Beitrag von anonym12 »

Hello first of all I would like to introduce myself.
My name is ....... and I`m ........... years old.
I was born on 18[sup]th[/sup] of September 1994 in ........
I have two brothers and one sister and I live in ........... with my mom and my dad.
I attended the primary school and the secondary school in ...............
After there I started an apprenticeship as a mechanic. I graduated in March this year. Currently I work in a garage in ..................
In fall this year I start my civilian service at the Red Cross in ................
I do it at the Red Cross because I think it is a good chance to learn something and to help people.
I do the A levels to improve my English skills and maybe to study technical engineering or something like this in my future. I want to study because I want to be developer in a big company and to ern a good pay.
Now, I would like to tell you something about my hobbies and interests.
My most favourite hobby is working on cars because I really like this work.  
I also enjoy playing football, skiing and meeting my friends.
And I spend the rest of my free time for continuing education for my job.
And my  motto is “Don’t dream it, do it.”


Bitte durchlesen obs so passt.
Könnte etwas mehr sein
falls jmd. Verbesserungsvorschläge hat bitte hinzufügen. :wink:

Schuyler

Re: Personal Introduction- Korrekturlesen

Beitrag von Schuyler »

Hello. First of all, I would like to introduce myself.
My name is ......., and I'm ........... years old.
I was born on the 18[sup]th[/sup] of September 1994 in ........
I have two brothers and one sister, and I live in ........... with my mom and my dad.
I attended the primary school and the secondary school in ...............
After that, I started an apprenticeship as a mechanic. I graduated in March this year. Currently, I work in a garage in ..................
This fall, I start my civilian service at the Red Cross in ................
I chose to do my service [Oder "I am doing my service ...," "I will do / will be doing my service ...," aber nicht simple present] at the Red Cross because I thought it would be a good chance to learn something and to help people.
I am doing my A levels to improve my English skills and possibly so I can study technical engineering or something like that in my future. I want to study because I want to be a developer in a big company and to earn a good salary.
Now, I would like to tell you something about my hobbies and interests.
My most favourite hobby is working on cars because I really enjoy it.  
I also enjoy playing football, skiing and meeting with my friends.
And I spend the rest of my free time for continuing my education for my job.
And my motto is “Don’t dream it; do it.”