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[goodox]

Hallo, 
hier muss ich ein Unfallbericht schreiben. Leider weiß ich, dass ich auch hier genug Fehler gemacht habe  und eure Hilfe brauche.
Danke.

Hi Luc,

last week I had an accident with an another car. I turned out there for a moment. My cellphone rang and I took it, read the message during I drove. Really, only for a second, and than happened. It was so stupid on my part. The traffic light switched red and I didn’t see that, than I bumped into a car that’s slowed. I damage the front of my car. That will be expensive. I have to buy headlights, left wing, cooler, bumper and several things more. I have to do it by myself. I didn’t have so much money, that I can pay for a garage. But whereat I’m really glad that’s there’s no one seriously hurt. And that’s really important. The woman in an another car, in that I driven, had only a shock. 

[Keswick (Contributor)]

goodox:
Hallo, 
hier muss ich ein Unfallbericht schreiben. Leider weiß ich, dass ich auch hier genug Fehler gemacht habe und eure Hilfe brauche.
Danke.

Hi Luc,

Last week I had an accident with an another car. I turned out there for a moment (das verstehe ich nicht, was willst du damit sagen?). My cell phone rang and I took it, read the message while I was driving. Honestly, it was only for a second, and then it happened. It was so stupid on my part. The traffic light switched to red and I didn’t see that. , than I bumped into a car in front of me that had slowed down. I damaged the front of my car. That will be expensive. I have to get new headlights, the left wing, cooler, bumper and several other things. I have to fix it by myself. I don't have enough money to have it fixed in a garage. However, I’m really glad nobody was seriously hurt. And that’s really important. The woman of the car that I bumped into only suffered from a shock. 

Hallo,

Achte bitte auf den Unterschied zwischen then = dann und than = als. Das verwechselst du hin und wieder .

VG
Keswick

[goodox]

Vielen Dank.

I turned out there for a moment(das verstehe ich nicht, was willst du damit sagen?).

Das habe ich aus dict.cc übernommen. Das soll "ich war für einen Moment abgelenkt" bedeuten. 

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Oh! Du meinst "I was tuned out there for a moment". Du schriebst "turned"  Das hat mich verwirrt. Sorry!

Ich finde den Satz "I was tuned out there for a moment" ziemlich altbacken und wenig aussagekraeftig. Wieso schreibst du nicht einfach "I was distracted only for a short moment" ?

[goodox]

Ja, das ist viel besser. Danke.

[Alyssea]

goodox:
Hallo, 
hier muss ich ein Unfallbericht schreiben. Leider weiß ich, dass ich auch hier genug Fehler gemacht habe und eure Hilfe brauche.
Danke.

Hi Luc,

Last week I had an accident with an another car. I got distracted. (A short sentence here sounds better to me, since you go into more detail afterward.) My cellphone rang and I took it, read the message while I was driving. Honestly, it was only for a second, and then it happened. It was so stupid on my part. The traffic light turned red and I didn’t notice, which caused me to bump into a car in front of me that had slowed down. I damaged the front of my car. It will be expensive to repair. I have to get new headlights, a left wing, cooler, bumper, and several other things. And I have to fix it by myself. I don't have enough money to have it fixed in a garage. However, I’m really glad nobody was seriously hurt. That’s really important. The woman in the car that I bumped into only suffered from shock. 

Are you trying to say that you got a text, answered a call and talked to someone, or got a voicemail? "Read the message" doesn't make much sense with "rang and I took it." If you got a text, it should be "My cellphone got a text (or "notification"), and I read the message while I was driving." If you got a call and answered, it should be "My cellphone rang and I answered, and talked while I was driving." If it rung but went to voicemail, it should be "My cellphone rang, and I listened to the voicemail while I was driving."

[goodox]

"My cellphone  got a text(or "notification"), and I read the message while I was driving."

That's what I mean. Thanks for the enlightenment.