Korrektus des kleinen Briefes

[schinid]

Hallo, Zusammen!
Ich habe einen Brief (Übungsbrief) auf englisch geschrieben, weiss aber nicht wo ich Fehler gemacht habe, und die hab ich bestimmt gemacht )) Ich würde sehr dankbar, wenn jemand meinen Brief korrigiert.
Vielen Dank im Voraus!
Dear Louise, you beat me again yesterday. You beat me, because I came home, when it was already dark. But you forget that now gets dark early, and my working day ends at five, and at this time is already starting to get dark. Unfortunately I can not change the daylight hours, and can not reduce the working day. I am writing this letter to you, because I am afraid to speak with you. Why everything became at us so difficult? Do you remember our wedding, how we were happy? How do you carried me in arms? I knew that I marry the strong woman, and I thought that you will protect me, but not to beat itself. You punish me not for anything. It comes to the absurd. And I can not so any more! If you don't cease to treat so to me, I will leave you! As I still love you, I suggest we find a compromise. I will call you not 4, but 8 once a day and before an exit from work. I very much love you and I hope that at us everything will be good. I ask to respond to my letter with the letter that you again didn't beat me. I love you infinitely. Yours and only yours Patrick.

[Alyssea]

Dear Louise,          

          You beat me again yesterday. You beat me because I came home when it was already dark. But you forgot that it gets dark early now, and my working day ends at five, and by then it is already starting to get dark. Unfortunately, I cannot (or "can't") change the daylight hours, and cannot (or "can't") reduce the hours I work. I am writing this letter to you because I am afraid to speak with you. Why has everything with us become so difficult? Do you remember our wedding, how we were happy? How you carried me in your arms? I knew that I married a strong woman, and I thought that you would protect me, not beat me. You punish me for no reason. It has become absurd. And I cannot (or "can't") take it anymore! If you don't cease to treat me like this, I will leave you!
        Since I still love you, I suggest we find a compromise. I will call you not not four, but eight times a day, and before leaving work. I love you very much, and I hope that everything with us will be good. Please respond to my letter and don't beat me again. (I'm guessing this is the meaning you're going for?) I love you infinitely.

Yours and only yours,
Patrick