Bitte um Korrektur- Anfrage für ein Praktikum

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Hallo Leute,

ich möchte fragen, ob es möglich wäre sich um ein Praktikum zu bewerben. Was meint ihr? Ist das so in Ordnung?

Danke im Voraus


Dear Ms. XY,

Today I saw the agency among my followers on Instagram. Reading in the description part, that it is a communications agency, I got interested and visited the agency's homepage. It is a great coincidence because, I saw that you are offering intern placements and I am actually searching for an internship in the field of marketing and PR, especially with focus on fashion and digital marketing.

Currently, I am majoring in XY at the XY University in XY, Germany. I am planning to do an internship in England for 2 months this summer and I would like to know whether there is a vacant position I could apply for.


Thank you for taking time and considering my inquiry.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Dear Ms XY, - kein Punkt hinter Ms, Mr, Mrs

During internet research, I came across your company X (namentlich erwaehnen!). The fact that X offers intern placements is of great interest to me, as I am currently looking for the opportunity to do an internship in marketing and PR, with focus on digital marketing and fashion. 

Currently, I am majoring in XY at the XY University in XY, Germany. I am planning to do an internship in England for 2 months  this summer and I would like to know whether X offers an internship during this time which I could apply for.


Thank you for taking time and considering my inquiry.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely

Hallo,

Ich wuerde es ein wenig umschreiben um es etwas professioneller klingen zu lassen. Es ist fuer einen potentiellen AG nicht wichtig, wo du die Firma gefunden hast, sondern dass du die Firma gefunden hast. 

Ist mein Vorschlag okay?

Gruss
Keswick