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Opinion essay

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Hallo! Könntet ihr bitte meinen opinion essay kontrollieren?
Ich freue mich auch über Meinungen auf englisch über den Inhalt :) Was sagt ihr zu diesem Thema?


Opinion Essay: Migrant men banned from German swimming pool
Link: http://www.bbc.com/news/world-europe-35326090

Front-page news: political decisions and refugee crisis every day. Recently a new problem arises: male asylum seekers harass woman. But why is this happening? Is this a common thing in other countries? And is the solution of the problem really to ban all refugees from different places? Do you agree or disagree with this decision?

Nearly everybody knows what happened in the New Year’s Eve in Cologne. And now an another incident occured in a public bath house. It is shocking and sad; is it really so difficult to live in peace? This behavior cannot be excused!

Nevertheless I am absolutely certain that banning from different places is not the right way. It solves the problem only for a short time. What about stricter laws? It surely is easier said than done. But there is a need for a change! Otherwise, nothing will change. I definitely feel that harassment of woman is a terrible crime and should be punished hard. In serious cases, I am in the opinion that banishing of the country is a just punishment. Everyone should know that every individual must be treated with respect, regardless of where they come from. And who does not know, has no place in our country.

All this things considered it seems reasonable to assume that only banning from public places is the wrong way. And do not forget! There are black sheep everywhere, no matter if German or African origin, so you can not throw all in the same pot. Other asylum seekers should not suffer under the other wrongdoing. There should be strict laws, and if anyone dares to harass woman, he should be arrested as quick as possible. And in serious cases, the offenders should be banished from the country as fast as can be.

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Kasperl1020 hat geschrieben:Hallo! Könntet ihr bitte meinen opinion essay kontrollieren?
Ich freue mich auch über Meinungen auf englisch über den Inhalt :) Was sagt ihr zu diesem Thema?


Opinion Essay: Migrant men banned from German swimming pool
Link: http://www.bbc.com/news/world-europe-35326090

Front-page news: political decisions and refugee crisis every day. Recently a new problem arose: male asylum seekers harassing women. But why is this happening? Is this a common occurrence in other countries? And is the solution to the problem really to ban all refugees from certain places? Do you agree or disagree with this decision?

Nearly everybody knows what happened on New Year’s Eve in Cologne. And now an another incident occurred in a public swimming pool. It is shocking and sad; is it really so difficult to live in peace? This behavior cannot be excused!

Nevertheless I am absolutely certain that banning from certain places is not the right approach to the issue. It solves the problem only temporarily. What about stricter laws? It surely is easier said than done. But something has to be done! Otherwise, nothing will change. I definitely feel that harassment of women is a terrible crime and should be severely punished. In my opinion the only proper punishment in serious cases would be deportation of the offenders. Everyone should know that every individual must be treated with respect, regardless of where they come from. And people who lack this respect have no place in our country.

All these things considered it seems reasonable to assume that the simple banning of certain people from public places is the wrong approach. And one fact that should not be forgotten is, that there are black sheep everywhere. And those black sheep might be of German or African origin so nobody should be tarred with the same brushOther asylum seekers should not suffer from other people's wrongdoing. There should be strict laws, and if anyone dares to harass women, they should be arrested as quick as possible. And in serious cases, the offenders should be deported from the country as fast as possible.
I think the essay is alright as is, the topic is controversial but I do agree with your argumentation, especially in regards to not tarring every asylum seeker with the same brush.