Korrektur - erster Schultag

[Angie1986]

My first day in school. It's been a while ago, but I can still remember. I was very exited. Exspecially what was in my school bag inside. I was allowed to get dressed really smart. My parents were there,my brother,my grandparents and my cousine and her husband. Then we went to church. The church service I found very boring. Then photos were taken, that was also not very interesting. Then all the children went out with their parents to the primary school. Then came the new class teacher and has led us in the classroom. I can't remember, next to who I'm sat. Then we went with our parents to the gym hall. There, the first graders sat in a row and there was a performance with different peoples from the upper classes. It was funny and I was no longer nervous. After that, there was something to eat, to drink and snacks. When I came back home, I was very tired. But I also opened my school bag and there I found many sweets. It was a very exiting day.

[Schuyler]

My first day at school: it's been a while ago, but I can still remember it. I was very exited, especially with what was inside my school bag. I was allowed to get dressed really smartly. My parents were there, along with my brother, my grandparents, and my cousin and her husband. Then, we went to church. I found the church service very boring. Then, photos were taken; that was also not very interesting. Then all the children went out with their parents to the primary school. Then, the new class teacher came and has led us into the classroom. I can't remember whom I sat next to. Then, we went with our parents to the gym hall. There, the first graders sat in a row, and there was a performance by different students from the upper classes. It was funny, and I was no longer nervous. After that, there were snacks to eat and drink. When I came back home, I was very tired. But I also opened my school bag and there I found many sweets. It was a very exiting day.

Ein Hinweis: Versuch es, deine Sätze nicht jedes Mal mit then zu beginnen. Es gibt viele andere Wörter und Phrasen, die du einsetzen könntest, um die Geschichte mehr interessant zu machen. Zum Beispiel:

- The next thing we did was go to church.
- Afterwards, photos were taken; that was also not very interesting.
- Once we were finished taking photos, all the children went with their parents to the primary school.
- When we got there, the new class teacher came and led us into the classroom.
- Etc.

[tiorthan]

Es gibt viele andere Wörter und Phrasen, die du einsetzen könntest, um die Geschichte interessanter zu machen. Zum Beispiel:

Small thing