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[sanane11]

Hallo , 

Kann  mir vielleicht jemand Verbesserungsvorschläge geben?
Das ist ein Comment. 

Nowadays a lot of people discuss about the advantages and disadvantages of technology for example the television or computers. What are the most important facts about the use of computers?

First of all one can say that the use of computer or television help us  to improve our standard of living .There are a lot of people but also manufactures who sell their products to their customers who live around the world via the Internet.
People all over the world can buy products which they cannot buy or are much more expensive  in their country .Therefore the use of internet for example help to improve our living standards without paying too much money .


Moreover the  use of the internet or mobile phones makes life more comfortable for us. Paying our bills online
or speaking with our friends who live far away is possible . We do not need to leave our homes and  can enjoy  the comfort of our homes.

But what are the disadvantages of technology? Regarding the increasing number of addicted  young people in comporison with those who use technology for positive and necessary things as for homework, one has to say that computers  have a less positive impact on teenagers who get sad or unhappy by the lack of their mobile phones or computers.

Moreover the number of teenagers spending hours at home in front of the addictive TV gets more and more . Unfortunately Those children number of friends outside social networks gets more  less which is why parents of such children are helpless.


But what can we do? Our most important duty is to inform teenagers , children and also adults about the risks of the use of  technology. It is important to teach them that as  everything has to ve taken in measure for instance medicine et cetera the internet has to be used in measure and not more. 


Taking all these arguments into consideration  our duty is to tell others that it is necessery to use the internet or  mobile phones in measure  in order to prevent that the number of addicted people gets higher .

[sanane11]

Hallo , 


Ich habe einiges etwas umformuliert

Kann  mir vielleicht jemand Verbesserungsvorschläge geben?
Das ist ein Comment. 

Nowadays a lot of people discuss about the advantages and the disadvantages of technology for example the television or computers. What are the most important facts about their use ?

First of all one can say that the use of computer or television for example  help us  to improve our standards of living .There are a lot of people but also manufactures who sell their products to customers who live around the world via  internet.
People all over the world can buy products which they cannot buy or which  are much more expensive  in their country through the internet from other countries. Therefore the use of internet helps us to improve our living standards without paying too much money .


Moreover the  use of the internet or mobile phones makes life more comfortable for us. Paying our bills online
or speaking with our friends who live far away is possible . We do not need to leave our homes and  can enjoy  the comfort of our homes.

But what are the disadvantages of technology? Regarding the increasing number of addicted  young people in comporison with those who use technology for positive and necessary things as for homework, one has to say that computers  have a less positive impact on teenagers .
Technology is addictive which is why parents often want to keep their children away from technology Above a certain age limit.  The reason is that we often witness  teenagers aggression when failing aggressive in  a computer game. 

Moreover the number of teenagers spending hours at home in front of the addictive TV gets more and more . Unfortunately  most childrens number of friends outside social networks gets less and  less which is why parents of such children are helpless.


But what can we do? Our most important duty is to inform teenagers , children and also adults about the risks of the use of  technology. It is important to teach them that likewise everything has to be taken in measure for instance medicine,  the internet has to be used in measure too .


Taking all these arguments into consideration  our duty is to tell others that it is necessery to use the internet or  mobile phones  et cetera in measure  in order to prevent  addiction .

[Schuyler]

Nowadays, a lot of people discuss about the advantages and the disadvantages of technology: for example, the television and computers. What are the most important facts about their use?

First of all, one can say that the use of computers or television, for example, helps us to improve our standards of living. There are a lot of people and manufacturers who sell their products via the internet to customers who live around the world.
Through the internet, people all over the world can buy products from other countries that they could not buy otherwise or that are much more expensive in their country. Therefore, the use of internet helps us to improve our living standards without paying too much money.


Moreover, the use of the internet or mobile phones makes life more comfortable for us. Paying our bills online
or speaking with our friends who live far away is possible. We do not need to leave our homes and can instead enjoy their comfort.
[Saying "our homes" twice in this sentence is very repetitive, which is something you want to avoid so your writing sounds smoother. Before using the same word again, try to think of an alternative way to express yourself. In this case, it works to just simplify the sentence. You could also say something like "We do not need to leave our homes and can instead enjoy the comfort of our own sofa/bed/chair/room/etc."]

But what are the disadvantages of technology? Regarding the increasing number of addicted young people in comparison with those who use technology for positive and necessary things, such as homework, one has to say that computers have a less positive impact on teenagers.
Technology is addictive, which is why parents often want to keep their children above a certain age limit away from technology. The reason is that we often witness aggression from teenagers who are exposed to aggression while playing computer games.

In addition, the number of teenagers spending hours at home in front of the addictive TV increases more and more. Unfortunately, the number of friends most children have outside social networks is constantly shrinking, which is why parents of such children feel helpless.


But what can we do? Our most important duty is to inform teenagers, children and also adults about the risks of technology use. It is important to teach them that just as everything has to be taken in moderation - for instance, medicine - the internet should be, too.


Taking all these arguments into consideration, our duty is to tell others that it is necessary to use the internet, mobile phones, et cetera in moderation in order to prevent addiction.

[sanane11]

Danke sehr , 

Einige Frage hätte ich da noch

Muss nach Nowadays  und for example immer ein Komma gesetzt werden? 


Was ist der unterschied zwischen via the internet und through the internet? 

Ganz am Ende wollte ich sagen" in maßen
" . Ist das dann nicht measure ? 
Und der Satz nach dem "through the internet..." warum sagt man da that und nicht which ? 

Nochmals vielen Dank 

[Schuyler]

Muss nach Nowadays  und for example immer ein Komma gesetzt werden?

Correct. You can see a list of the English comma rules here: http://www.englisch-hilfen.de/grammar/kommasetzung.htm . Nowadays is an example of an introductory element, and for example would fall under the "wenn Phrasen eingeschoben wurden" category.

Was ist der unterschied zwischen via the internet und through the internet?

Both phrases have basically the same meaning, ie. doing something by using the internet.

However, there is a difference between via and through when used in the context of movement or traveling. Via is used in the sense of "by means of" or "by using:" you are using something (such as a road or a vehicle) to get somewhere else or that is along the way to your destination. Through is used in the sense of "into" or "across:" you are moving into / across the middle of something.

For example, compare these two sentences:

I walked through the field. = I walked across the field.
I walked through the field via the path. = I walked across the field by using the path. / I used the path to walk across the field.

Ganz am Ende wollte ich sagen" in maßen
" . Ist das dann nicht measure ?

The phrase in Maßen cannot be translated into English literally as "in measure." Instead, we would say in moderation, meaning to consume or use something (such as the internet) within reasonable limits and not in excess.

I assume this phrase comes from the adjective moderate, which means average or reasonable in size, ie. an amount that is not too much and not too little. Ex. A moderate price, moderate exercise, moderate pain, etc.

Und der Satz nach dem "through the internet..." warum sagt man da that und nicht which ?

I explained the difference between that and which in another thread earlier today, so I'm going to quote that post here:

This is something I realized just recently: many people, including native speakers, confuse the difference between that and which. That is used to introduce a restrictive clause (a part of the sentence that gives essential information and cannot be removed without changing the sentence meaning,) while which is used to introduce a nonrestrictive clause (a part of the sentence that gives additional information and can be removed without changing the sentence meaning.)

So, if you look at your sentence, "People all over the world can buy products [which / that] they could not buy otherwise or are much more expensive in their country," you can see that the information describing the products cannot be removed without the sentence losing its meaning. Therefore, the clause is restrictive and needs to have that, not which: "People all over the world can buy products that they could not buy otherwise or (that) are much more expensive in their country."

[sanane11]

Aaah okey, vielen Dank 

Des Satz "one has to take everything in measure" hatte ich mal in der modernen englischen Version in Shakespeares Drama gesehen. Ich glaube es ist aber nicht mehr modernes Englisch. 

[tiorthan]

While "measure" was used in a similar sense in Shakespeare's time. That phrase occurs nowhere in the original works of Shakespeare, so I'm not sure where you've seen that.

Today, "measure" is still sometimes used to mean something like "a moderate amount" but the modern instances of that usage that I could find were limited to the form of "a measure of something" or similar.

[sanane11]

Nee, nicht in der originalen englischen Version aber einer modernen Version des Dramas stand es so geschrieben

[sanane11]

Ich hab nicht ganz verstanden, warum bei dem letzten Absatz steht:
"...in moderation - for instance , medicine - the internet ..."

Wann kann man Bindestriche einfügen und warum kann man nicht einfach Kommas anstatt diese setzten?

[Schuyler]

The "for instance" part needs to be separated from the rest of the sentence, but a comma is too weak for this kind of break, same with the "for example, television and computers" in the very first sentence of the essay. A dash or a colon is more appropriate, as they represent a stronger pause. You could also use parenthesis: "... everything has to be taken in moderation (for instance, medicine,) the internet should be, too."

[tiorthan]

Ich hab nicht ganz verstanden, warum bei dem letzten Absatz steht:
"...in moderation - for instance , medicine - the internet ..."

Wann kann man Bindestriche einfügen und warum kann man nicht einfach Kommas anstatt diese setzten?

Diese Striche heißen Gedankenstriche im Deutschen und im Textsatz wird dafür auch ein anderes Zeichen benutzt als für den Bindestrich (das ist nur nicht auf der Tastatur zu finden).
Gedankenstriche werden für solche Einschübe auch im Deutschen oft benutzt.