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[Grasdackel]

Hi @ all, bin mir nicht schluessig ob ich das so stehen lassen kann... schon mal vielen Dank vorab fuer die Hilfe!

Born and grown up in Bavaria. Currently residing in Reutlingen. First instrument was a small keyboard at the age of 6 years. This happened at Christmas as a present from the grandparents. Previously, was always tinkling the organ of some acquaintances. To be funny and to make the clown, began almost at the same time. Therefore, later twice expelled from school. It can also exaggerate. From an early age to adolescence acted for various theater and choral groups in Munich. For years, had individual lessons and visiting music school for learning piano and drums. At age 16, the first band. As a keyboardist. At same time started to sing and compose songs. The late nineties small solo programs in Munich. Then try a few bands. But it was crap. 2003 many own songs in luggage moved to Reutlingen. Solo concert at LTT. The cultural world RT / TÜ opened new doors. One of them, the band Mr. Five. The other is the Hard Rock cover band Isle Of Rock. Small appearances as "Hias" and other programs as a cabaret artist in Reutlingen and Tübingen. Again and again written new songs. Needed a guitarist so shortly learned guitar. Many concerts. Currently singer in projects like Mr. Five, ScreedArt, Isle Of Rock and diverse commitments. That isn't half bad
Gruesse - grasdackel

[Schuyler]

I was born and raised in Bavaria. I am currently residing in Reutlingen. My first instrument was a small keyboard when I was six years old. I received it for Christmas as a present from my grandparents. Previously, I had always been playing with an organ that belonged to some of my acquaintances. My desire to be funny and act like a clown [kein Komma] began almost at the same time. Therefore, I was later expelled twice from school. It can also exaggerate. [Was meinst du damit?] From an early age to adolescence, I acted for various theater and choral groups in Munich. For years, I had individual lessons and visited a music school for learning piano and drums. At age 16, I was in my first band as a keyboardist. At same time, I started to sing and compose songs. In the late nineties, I performed small solo shows in Munich. Then I tried a few bands, but it was crap. In 2003, I wrote many songs of my own and moved to Reutlingen. [Verstehe ich das richtig?] I played a solo concert at LTT. The cultural world of RT / TÜ opened new doors. One of them was the band Mr. Five. The other was the Hard Rock cover band Isle Of Rock. I made small appearances as "Hias" and other shows as a cabaret artist in Reutlingen and Tübingen. Again and again, I wrote new songs. We [?] needed a guitarist, so I quickly learned guitar. I performed many more concerts. Currently, I am the singer in projects like Mr. Five, ScreedArt, Isle Of Rock, and various other commitments. That isn't half bad.

Denk daran: Im Englischen kann man normalerweise das Subjekt des Satzes nicht weglassen. Man sagt also nicht "From an early age to adolescence, acted for various theater and choral groups in Munich," zum Beispiel, sondern "From an early age to adolescence, I acted for various theater and choral groups in Munich." Sonst werden die Sätze oft verwirrend und schwer zu verstehen, denn mit dem Verb allein ist es nicht immer klar was der Subjekt sein muss. Z.B., im Satz "Needed a guitarist so shortly learned guitar" bin ich nicht ganz sicher, ob du "I needed" oder "We (your band) needed" meinst. Ich vermute, du meinst "we," aber beide sind möglich im Kontext und mit dem Konjugation des Verbs.

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hi and welcome back, dear grasdackel!

Ok, I'm only speaking for myself here, but I would strongly recommend that you improve the above text yourself by forming correct English sentences, viz., present them with a subject, please, just because it's Christmas, OK?

That will make you discover errors in tense and verbforms, I'm sure, and then we will have much more fun with your really interesting text.
On top of that, I should imagine that correcting your own text and finding this and that could boost your self-confidence from Reutlingen to Hamburg!

Love,
Duckduck

[Duckduck (Contributor)]

Hi and welcome back, dear grasdackel!

Ok, I'm only speaking for myself here, but I would strongly recommend that you improve the above text yourself by forming correct English sentences, viz., present them with a subject, please, just because it's Christmas, OK?

That will make you discover errors in tense and verbforms, I'm sure, and then we will have much more fun with your really interesting text.
On top of that, I should imagine that correcting your own text and finding this and that could boost your self-confidence from Reutlingen to Hamburg!

Love,
Duckduck

Ooh, @Schuyler was faster.
And you've done the good work already.
But I still feel we should make our friends here in the forum try to work a little harder themselves, before we correct their texts for them. Especially if - as with grasdackel here - they are quite capable of doing a little better than in their first attempt.
What do the others think?
No offence meant, dear Schuyler, just my two pennies worth..
Love,
Duckduck

[Schuyler]

No offense taken. c: What I mainly wanted to do was to explain how the subject needs to be included in the sentence, and since I was writing a post, I thought I would go ahead and correct the text at the same time. But I see what you're saying. That makes sense.

Well, maybe you want to try revising your text and seeing how you might improve it, Grasdackel? Duckduck is right: your English skills are not bad at all. Seems like the majority of the corrections I made here are just adding in the subject and adjusting the verb to match, so if you focus on fixing that yourself, I think you will notice a lot of improvement.