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[Hicham7]

My Name Hicham B.... i´am 35years old, i´am married and have two children. my oldest child is my daughter and she is seven years old and my son is one year old. At the Moment, i work in the department Maintenance and Repair. my Workspace is in the Test area, my Task are check and set of Control Units. i have Addition part-time Training in the field of mechanical engineering and i will be finished in sommer 2016.   

[Keswick (Contributor)]

My name Hicham B.... i´am 35years old, I am married and I have two children. My oldest child is my daughter and she is seven years old. My son is one year old. At the moment I work in the maintenance and repair department of my company. My work area is in the test area. My tasks are to check and to set of control units. I am doing additional part-time training in mechanical engineering and I will be finished in summer 2016.   

Hallo Hicham,

Achte bitte darauf, dass Nomen im Englischen idR nicht gross geschrieben werden. "I" im Sinne von "ich" wird immer gross geschrieben, ebenso Eigennamen. Auch bildet man im Englischen kuerzere Saetze als im Deutschen.

[Hicham7]

Vielen Dank Keswick

[Hicham7]

I work in the maintenance and repair department of my company.
wenn man sich intern in eine andere Abteilung bewirbt, sagt man trotzdem ... of my Company?

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Wenn du dich intern bewirbst, kannst du "of my company" rauslassen.

Handelt es sich denn um eine Vorstellung fuer eine interne Stelle?

[Schuyler]

Habe ein paar weitere Fehler gefunden:

My name is Hicham B ... I am 35 years old. I am married, and I have two children. My oldest child is my daughter, and she is seven years old. My son is one year old. At the moment, I work in the maintenance and repair department of my company. My work area is in the test area. [Ich würde vorschlagen, diese zwei Sätze zu kombinieren, also: "At the moment, I work in the test area of the maintenance and repair department of my company."] My tasks are to check and set control units. I am doing additional part-time training in mechanical engineering, and I will be finished in summer 2016.

[Keswick (Contributor)]

 I have corrected the i'am and 35years.. no idea why they're showing as wrong in my correction. Sorry about that.

[Hicham7]

ja für eine interne stelle, hab meine Fehler vorhin auch entdeckt.