Meine short story

[sanane11]

Hallo , 

Das soll meine short-Story sein . Kann vielleicht jemand rüberkucken ? 

A little boy rund to his mother  with the eggs he took from their neighbour's cage.When his Mother sees him she takes the eggs and says " thank you my son , come with me I will prepare fried eggs for you ". Time Passes and the child begins to take everything from the neighbour's house and give it to his mother. The mother becomes happy about the boys behaviour . She does not ask where he got them all. 
Years Pass by and the boy got older. He becomes happy a thief and gives all he has stolen to his mother . He also kills some people to get what he wants . He becomes inhuman and he also gets use to criminality. At the end he gets catched. The judge wants him to be executed. When he is at the gallow they ask him about his last wish. He says that he wants to See hus mother . His mother came in Front of him with tears in her eyes. The son says that she should Came closer because he wants to Kiss her tongue. The mother gets closer and Sticks her tongue out too but the son bites it instead of Kissinger it and tears it away with violence  every boy looks shocked and sa
y " how can you make this when you know that you will die now  ". 
The man says Calmly " when i am here now it is the fault of my mother . She never Asket me about the things i brought to her . She always commended me but never scolded me .my Situationen is her fault. 

Ist die Sprache in Ordnung ? 

[Schuyler]

A little boy runs to his mother with the eggs he took from their neighbour's cage. When his mother* sees him, she takes the eggs and says "Thank you, my son, come with me; I will prepare fried eggs for you." Time passes and the child begins to take everything from the neighbour's house and give it to his mother. The mother becomes happy about the boys behaviour. She does not ask where he got all the things. 
Years pass by and the boy gets older. He becomes happy being a thief and gives all he has stolen to his mother. He also kills some people to get what he wants. He becomes inhuman, and he gets used to criminal behaviour, too. In the end, he gets caught. The judge wants him to be executed. When he is at the gallows, they ask him about his last wish. He says that he wants to see his mother. His mother comes in front of him with tears in her eyes. The son says that she should come closer because he wants to kiss her tongue. The mother gets closer and sticks her tongue out, too but the son bites it instead of kissing it and tears it away violently. Everybody looks shocked, and they say, "How can you do this when you know that you will die now?"
The man says calmly, "That I* am here now it is the fault of my mother. She never asked me about the things I brought to her. She always praised me but never scolded me. My situation is her fault."

* Denk daran: Nur Eigennamen und "I" werden im Englischen groß geschrieben. Andere Nomen, Verben, Präpositionen, usw. werden immer klein geschrieben, außer wenn sie am Anfang des Satzes stehen. (Oder wenn sie als Namen benutzt werden, z.B. "When Mother saw him ...")

[sanane11]

Ist das denn gemäss einer short story oder soll/kann  ich da noch etwas ändern ? 

[Ehab Goda]

A little boy runs to his mother with the eggs he took from their neighbour's cage. When his mother* sees him, she takes the eggs and says "Thank you, my son, come with me; I will prepare fried eggs for you." Time passes and the child begins to take everything from the neighbour's house and give it to his mother. The mother becomes happy about the boys behaviour. She does not ask where he got all the things. 
Years pass by and the boy gets older. He becomes happy being a thief and gives all he has stolen to his mother. He also kills some people to get what he wants. He becomes inhuman, and he gets used to criminal behaviour, too. In the end, he gets caught. The judge wants him to be executed. When he is at the gallows, they ask him about his last wish. He says that he wants to see his mother. His mother comes in front of him with tears in her eyes. The son says that she should come closer because he wants to kiss her tongue. The mother gets closer and sticks her tongue out, too but the son bites it instead of kissing it and tears it away violently. Everybody looks shocked, and they say, "How can you do this when you know that you will die now?"
The man says calmly, "That I* am here now it is the fault of my mother. She never asked me about the things I brought to her. She always praised me but never scolded me. My situation is her fault."

* Denk daran: Nur Eigennamen und "I" werden im Englischen groß geschrieben. Andere Nomen, Verben, Präpositionen, usw. werden immer klein geschrieben, außer wenn sie am Anfang des Satzes stehen. (Oder wenn sie als Namen benutzt werden, z.B. "When Mother saw him ...")

It's a very good short story I must say, good luck and keep practicing.   

[sanane11]

Dankeschön 

[Sinatra85]

Ergänzung:

• Capitalize proper nouns and their adjectives if they derive from proper nouns (the Golden Gate Bridge, the Grand Canyon, a Shakespearean sonnet, etc.).
• Capitalize days & months 
• Governmental matters and Organizations (the U.S. Congress, the U.S. Constitution, the Department of Defense, Human Rights Watch, etc.
• Historical episodes (the American Revolutionary War, the Great Depression)
• Institutions (Los Angeles State University)
• Holidays (Christmas, New Year's Eve, Easter, etc.)
• the word "Bible" is usually capitalized 
• Capitalize formal titles when you use them directly. ("What's wrong, Officer?")
• Capitalize a relative status when it is followed by the name: "Yesterday, Aunt Mary baked cookies."

Hope I haven't forgotten any rules.

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Ergänzung:

• Capitalize proper nouns and their adjectives if they derive from proper nouns (the Golden Gate Bridge, the Grand Canyon, a Shakespearean Sonnet, etc.). 

[tiorthan]

Ergänzung:

• Capitalize proper nouns and their adjectives if they derive from proper nouns (the Golden Gate Bridge, the Grand Canyon, a Shakespearean Sonnet, etc.). 

If there were only one Shakespearean sonnet, then that would be the proper capitalization. But as it stands, Shakespearean, being derived from a name, has to be capitalized but it is just an ordinary adjective anyway.
Compare to "an English lesson". You don't capitalize lesson here either.

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Hi tiorthan,

I thought it had to be capitalised because Sinatra listed it as a "proper nouns and their adjectives if they derive from proper noun". Does that mean, that Sinatra is wrong with their example?

I admit, I hadn't heard of this rule before. Same goes for the "Aunt Sally" rule. Then again, I do live here and therefore focus on the correct use of the language in essays and the like, rather than on grammar.

[tiorthan]

I thought it had to be capitalised because Sinatra listed it as a "proper nouns and their adjectives if they derive from proper noun". Does that mean, that Sinatra is wrong with their example?

No Sinatra is right.

What they're basically saying is "You capitalize names and proper nouns no matter how they are used" and then give a lot of different examples of that.

All of the examples basically show that. It's the Grand Canyon because it's not a canyon named "Grand" or a thing called "Canyon" that is grand. The name in this case consists of both words strung together. But in "Shakespearean sonnet" you're talking about a sonnet by Shakespeare. Only the part that is actually derived from the name is capitalized.

[Sinatra85]

Aahhhh! It's Sonnet! Capitalized! Sorry! I was maybe unable to press the shift key. 

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Right, got it, thanks tiorthan, makes perfect sense now .

[tiorthan]

Aahhhh! It's Sonnet! Capitalized! Sorry! I was maybe unable to press the shift key. 

You were right the first time. No capitalization for sonnet, this is even provided as an example in several cases.

[Sinatra85]

Yeah you right! I am totally confused. Yes! No capitalization. Sorry for the confusion.