Short Text - Waking up

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Guugu

Short Text - Waking up

Beitrag von Guugu »

Hi there,

I've written a short text, it's nothing special. It might sound weird to you, but I tried something new. I've written some vocabulary into index cards and have taken one after another and wrote a sentence with it. That's the result. I genuinely would appreciate a correction :-)


"It's awful when you wake up in the morning and you have no idea why you've waken up. That might be the reason why some people are awe against life. In the other hand some people get attracted by the challenge to arise early in the morning to get things done. Often this requires being mentally attended to attain this goal. One who suffers to wake up when the first birds start singing, it might be helpful for them to attach a picture into their filed of view when they abandon their bed to acquire the first drive of motivation. You will be astonished how this will alter your day; at least I can assure that you should give it a try. In certain cases it can help when a family member of yours (yourself?) assists you by waking you up if you have trouble to get involved in alarms. There are people who assert that you only will be successful if you accustom to an alarm, so you can benefit tremendously (out?) of it and the aspect of time management becomes more into your life – especially when you're businessman and need to assemble with other partners in the international office. Of course you can ask for help by others, however you need to do it alone to become strong and disciplined"

Guugu

Re: Short Text - Waking up

Beitrag von Guugu »

Hi there,
are there really too many mistakes that it would take too much time to correct? Just wondering :-)

Keswick (Contributor)

Re: Short Text - Waking up

Beitrag von Keswick (Contributor) »

Hi Guguu,

I do struggle to understand what you are trying to say. Could you provide a German version of the text, so I have a reference?

Thanks,
Keswick

Schuyler

Re: Short Text - Waking up

Beitrag von Schuyler »

Hi there,

I've written a short text; it's nothing special. It might sound weird to you, but I tried something new. I've written some vocabulary onto index cards and have taken one after another to write a sentence with them. This is the result. I genuinely would appreciate any corrections.


"It's awful when you wake up in the morning and you have no idea why you've woken up. That might be the reason why some people are awe* against life. On the other hand some people are attracted to the challenge of rising early in the morning to get things done. Often this requires dedication to attain this goal. For one who struggles to wake up when the first birds start singing, it might be helpful for them to have a picture hanging in front of them when they leave their bed to find the first drive of motivation. You will be astonished how this will affect your day; at least I can assure you that you should give it a try. In certain cases it can help if a family member of yours (yourself?) assists you by waking you up if you have trouble using an alarm. There are people who assert that you will only be successful if you get used to an alarm, so you can benefit tremendously from it and gain better time management skills in your life – especially when you're a businessman and need to meet with other partners in the international office. Of course you can ask for help from others; however you need to do it alone to become strong and disciplined."
*I'm not sure what you meant here. Maybe "awe" was a typo? ^^


Not too bad! You use some great vocabulary in here; however, some of the words don't really fit well in these sentences. They have almost the right meaning for what you're trying to say but
not quite, or they just aren't what someone would normally say to express these ideas and they sound a little strange or awkward. The best advice I can think of is to study a variety of English sentences that use the words you're trying to learn so you can get a better idea of the context where they make sense. :)

UltimoSparc

Re: Short Text - Waking up

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In the beginning you wrote you have no idea why you've woken up . I would prefer you write you have no idea why you are there. I am pretty sure that is better.

All the best. 

Schuyler

Re: Short Text - Waking up

Beitrag von Schuyler »

If I understand correctly, I think what Guugu was talking about is when you wake up in the morning without a good reason or motivation to get out of bed, so what they wrote is okay as it is. If you were to say you have no idea why you are there, the sentence would then have a similar but somewhat different implication.