Erörterung/Essay - Bitte um Korrektur

[Torben98]

Guten Tag,
ich habe zur Übung eine kleine Eröterung zu dem Theme "ein Jahr im Ausland verbringen" geschrieben.
Ich würde mich freuen, wenn sich jemand die Mühe macht, den text zu lesen und zu korrigieren. Neben Tipps zur Rechtschreibung nehme ich auch sehr gerne Hinweise zur Grammatik und zum allgemeinen Aufbau an.


Spending a year abroad


After finishing school many teenagers consider to spend a year in another country.
The main problem is that they don't know what awaits them.

Firstly it's important to say that there are many facts affirming that a year abroads entails some prejudices.
So you can improve your language skills,  what can be helpfull, if you apply for a job.
But it is possible that you don't like the country; maybe because it's your first time there.
Apart from that there is is no direct contact with your friends at home,
but you meet new friends there.
On the one hand exchange programmes are very expensive,
but you can join a work-and-travel-programm to finance the journey.
As an example you can work on a farm.
Furthermore you are away from your family and maybe you fell lost.
Otherwise you have a second family in your host county and learn to stand on your own two feet,
what can be usefull, if you move out.
Another point is that you make a personal dream come true.

To sum it up I would say that a year abroad might be a memorable and helpfull experience,
if you getting along with not seeing your family and friends for a full year.

Viele Grüße
Torben

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Guten Tag,
ich habe zur Übung eine kleine Eröterung zu dem Thema "Ein Jahr im Ausland verbringen" geschrieben.

Ich würde mich freuen, wenn sich jemand die Mühe macht, den Text zu lesen und zu korrigieren. Neben Tipps zur Rechtschreibung nehme ich auch sehr gerne Hinweise zur Grammatik und zum allgemeinen Aufbau an.

Spending a year abroad


After finishing school many teenagers consider spending a year in another country.
The main problem is that they don't know what awaits them.

Firstly it's important to say that there are many facts affirming that a year abroad entails some prejudices. (das macht keinen Sinn.. es hat Vorurteile zur Folge?)
So you can improve your language skills, which can be helpful if you apply for a job.
But it is possible that you don't like the country; maybe because it's your first time there.
Apart from that there is is no direct contact with your friends at home, but you can meet new friends there.
On the one hand exchange programmes are very expensive, but you can join a work-and-travel-programme to finance the journey.
As an example you can work on a farm.
Furthermore you are away from your family and maybe you might feel a little bit lost.
On the other hand you have a second family in your host county and learn to stand on your own two feet,
what can be useful, if you move out from your parents' place.
Another point is that you make a personal dream come true.

To sum it up I would say that a year abroad might be a memorable and helpful experience,
if you manage to cope with not seeing your family and friends for a full year.

Viele Grüße
Torben

[Tom Bombadil]

Spending a year abroad


After finishing school many teenagers consider spending a year in another country.
The main problem is that they don't know what awaits them.

Firstly it's important to say that there are many facts affirming that a year abroad entails some prejudices. (das macht keinen Sinn.. es hat Vorurteile zur Folge?)
So you can improve your language skills, which [Frage: Würde man hier nicht eher "were" verwenden, da "skills" im Plural verwendet wird?] can be helpful if you apply for a job.
But it is possible that you don't like the country; maybe because it's your first time there.
Apart from that there is is no direct contact with your friends at home, but you can meet new friends there.
On the one hand exchange programmes are very expensive, but you can join a work-and-travel-programme to finance the journey.
As an example you can work on a farm.
Furthermore you are away from your family and maybe you might feel a little bit lost.
On the other hand you have a second family in your host country and learn to stand on your own two feet,
what can be useful, if you move out from your parents' place.
Another point is that you make a personal dream come true.

To sum it up I would say that a year abroad might be a memorable and helpful experience,
if you manage to cope with not seeing your family and friends for a full year.

Viele Grüße
Torben

[tiorthan]

So you can improve your language skills, which [Frage: Würde man hier nicht eher "were" verwenden, da "skills" im Plural verwendet wird?] can be helpful if you apply for a job.

Which und were haben nichts miteinander zu tun.

which = welche, welches, welcher, welchen, welchem
Das Relativpronomen "which" wird sowohl im Singular als auch im Plural benutzt.

were = warst, waren, wart
Die Vergangenheitsform von "be" in der zweiten Person Singular und allen Pluralformen.

Es gibt keine Möglichkeit "which" jemals durch "were" zu ersetzen.

[Tom Bombadil]

Hello tiorthan

Thank you very much for your explanations. And of course you're right. I missed the forrest for the trees and mixed up some grammatical rules. ^^

Best regards, 
Tom Bombadil