Korrektur, kleiner Teil des Civil Right Movements in den USA

[Nickname28]

Hallo,
würde mich sehr freuen, wenn ihr mir den Auszug aus meinem Vortrag über das Civil Right Movement korrigieren könntet.




Civil Rights Activities:

Montgomery Bus Boycott 1955:

The Montgomery Bus Boycott is classified as the starting point of the Civil Right Movement.
The black women Rosa Parks refused to give up her bus seat to a white passenger. Rosa Park was arrested. The black community of Montgomery started a bus boycott which meant that nobody took the bus, which reduced the bus revenue by 80%. The boycott’s goal was to protest the segregation in public buses and lasted more than a year. The president of the Montgomery Improvement Association (MIA) Martin Luther King Jr was leading the revolt. He demanded a respectful treatment and same rights for every passenger. In November 1956, the Supreme Court outlawed segregation on local bus lines which was a first victory for the black community.

Sit-ins
In 1960, four black students at a college in North Carolina decided to sit down peacefully at the Woolworth’s lunch corner where only whites ate, to protest against the exclusion of blacks. They were refused service, but would not leave and returned, joined by others. They inspired other sit-ins in public places like parks, beaches and libraries. Finally in July, Woolworth’s integrated all of its stores.



Freedom Riders:
Civil Rights activists began to take bus trips into the segregated states to test out the new law, which forbid segregation in interstate travel facilities. During the Freedom Rides, they travelled through the South to break the pattern of segregation in bus terminals including restrooms and water fountains.
The trips were a dangerous mission, racists beaten the riders in South Carolina and in Alabama a bus was set afire.
The Freedom Riders got support of U.S President Kennedy who ordered a new desegregation law which permitted the black passenger to sit wherever they chose on the bus and separate toilets and waiting rooms were consolidated.

1963 Birmingham:
Martin Luther King was arrested and jailed during anti-segregation protests which he had arranged in Birmingham 1963. More and more protesters came in the following day. The racist officers reacted with dogs and fire hoses against the protests. Images of the attacks on the protesters were published world-wide which led to great indignation. The officers were dismissed, King cames free and better working conditions were agreed.



March on Washington 1963:
The March on Washington was a political movement about 250 000 above all black peoples who were fighting for Jobs and especially Freedom. There Martin Luther King has delivered his historic “ I Have a dream..” speech advocating racial harmony.

[Schuyler]

Civil Rights Activities:

Montgomery Bus Boycott 1955:

The Montgomery Bus Boycott is classified considered[or seen -- "classified" usually means something is being put into a category or class] as the starting point of the Civil Right Movement.
The black women Rosa Parks refused to give up her bus seat to a white passenger. Rosa Park was arrested. The black community of Montgomery started a bus boycott, which meant that nobody took the bus, which reduced the bus revenue by 80%. The boycott’s goal was to protest the segregation in public buses and lasted more than a year. The president of the Montgomery Improvement Association (MIA,) Martin Luther King Jr., was leading the revolt. He demanded a respectful treatment and the same rights for every passenger. In November 1956, the Supreme Court outlawed segregation on local bus lines, which was a first victory for the black community.

Sit-ins:
In 1960, four black students at a college in North Carolina decided to sit down peacefully at the Woolworth’s lunch corner, where only whites ate, to protest against the exclusion of blacks. They were refused service but would not leave and returned, joined by others. They inspired other sit-ins in at public places like parks, beaches, and libraries. Finally in July, Woolworth’s integrated all of its stores.



Freedom Riders:
Civil Rights activists began to take bus trips into the segregated states to test out the new law, which forbid segregation in interstate travel facilities. During the Freedom Rides, they travelled through the South to break the pattern of segregation in bus terminals, including restrooms and water fountains.
The trips were a dangerous mission: racists beaten beat the riders in South Carolina, and in Alabama a bus was set afire.
The Freedom Riders got the support of [or got support from] U.S President Kennedy, who ordered a new desegregation law that permitted the black passenger to sit wherever they chose on the bus, and separate toilets and waiting rooms were consolidated integrated [or merged -- "consolidate" is usually used in a financial or legal context].

1963 Birmingham:
Martin Luther King was arrested and jailed during anti-segregation protests that he had arranged in Birmingham in 1963. More and more protesters came in the following day. The racist officers reacted with dogs and fire hoses against the protests. Images of the attacks on the protesters were published world-wide, which led to great indignation [I would probably say outrage -- "indignation" is a little too weak and suggests it comes from a personal offense, not anger about how other people are treated]. The officers were dismissed, King cames free [was released or was freed sounds better], and better working conditions were agreed arranged [or agreed upon].



March on Washington 1963:
The March on Washington was a political movement of about 250,000 above all [I'm not sure what you meant here, but it sounds odd] black peoples who were fighting for jobs and especially freedom. There Martin Luther King has delivered his historic “ I have a dream...” speech advocating racial harmony.

[tiorthan]

The March on Washington was a political movement of about 250,000 above all I'm not sure what you meant here, but it sounds odd]

Nickname28 probably meant the German "größtenteils" or something along those lines.

[Nickname28]

That's right tiorthan. What can I say for größtenteils? Most of?

[Schuyler]

Ah okay, verstehe. For this sentence, I think I would translate that as "The March on Washington was a political movement of about 250,000 people, mostly blacks, who were ..."

[tiorthan]

@Nickname28
As you can see "größtenteils" is "mostly"

mostly blacks, who were ..."

Ich habe noch ein anderes Problem gefunden. Schuyler schreibt "blacks", was natürlich korrekt ist, aber du hast in deinem ursprünglichen Text "black peoples" geschrieben.


Ursprünglich bedeutet "people" so viel wie "eine zahlenmäßig unbestimmt große Menge an Personen". Es handelt sich dabei also von Anfang an schon um Wort dass eine Mehrzahl ausdrückt und keine Einzahl. Daher ist "peoples" nicht wirklich sinnvoll.

Zu dieser ursprünglichen Bedeutung hat sich auch noch ein andere hinzugesellt. Aus der Rechtssprache hat sich die Verwendung "the people" mit der Bedeutung "das Volk" einen Weg in die Alltagssprache gebahnt. Im Gegensatz zu "people = Leute, Menschen, Personen", dass ein Mehrzahlwort ist, ist "people = Volk" ein Einzahlwort. Man kann sagen "A strange people" = "ein seltsames Volk". Aber dieses Wort kann man auch im Plural benutzen. "Black peoples" so wie du es oben geschrieben hast, würde also "Schwarze Völker" bedeuten, was wohl eher nicht dein Anliegen war.

[Nickname28]

Danke für die Hilfe und Erklärungen!!
Ich habe nun auch noch den zweiten Teil meines Vortrages fertig, auch da wäre ich noch sehr froh über eine Korrektur. (Englisch ist leider nicht mein Spitzenfach ;D )

March on Washington 1963:
The March on Washington was a political movement of about 250 000 mostly blacks who were fighting for jobs and especially freedom. There Martin Luther King has delivered his historic “ I have a dream..” speech advocating racial harmony.
An excerpt from his speech:
“I have a dream that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the colour of their skin but by the content of their character.”

Selma, Alabama 1965:
In 1965, King came to Selma to lead three marches in protest to discrimination in voter registration.
Two times they had to turn back, the first because violence resistance of Police and the second at a request of King. The last march had his intended effect and a new Voting rights act was passed.

Martin Luther King:
Martin Luther King was a pastor in Montgomery, Alabama with a strictly faith. He pursuits the goal that Black and Whites live in peace and equality and sermonize a non-violent resistance.
In 1955 King was elected to the president of the Montgomery Improvement Association ( MIA) and led his first demonstration the” Montgomery Bus Boycott”. This was the beginning point as the foremost leader in the civil rights movement. During this period of time he was more than 30 times in captivity.

The climax of his movement was “The March on Washington” with his “ I have a dream speech” where he got a lot of attention world-wide.
One year later in 1964, Martin Luther King received the Nobel Peace Prize for his work to end racial segregation and racial discrimination through non-violent.
In 1968, King was assassinated in Memphis.

Opponent of Martin Luther King’s movement

Malcom X

Malcom X born as Malcom Little, wasn’t a real opponent of Martin Luther King. But he had strongly criticised the non-violent resistance.
Malcom X goal was an independent state for Blacks only. To reach his aim he wasn’t baulk of violence.” Let’s make war” he said.

The Ku-Klux-Klan:

The Ku-Klux was a secret militant organisation founded by veterans of the Confederate Army whose aim was to resist social change and black’s efforts to improve their lives.
They reacted to the Civil Right Movement with bombing houses, setting buildings on fire or murdered activists.

Today’s situation:
Immigrants from the whole world are in the USA.
Different ethnic groups work together in same jobs and a lot of black’s have great positions in their firm.
Since 2009 Barack Obama is the first African American President of the United States.
But it gives still racial discrimination:
Black men who are employed only earn 74% as much as white men.
16,5% of the black male population had been to prison, compared to 2,7% of the white male population
For Black’s the death rate from gunshot wounds is nine time higher than the rate of whites.

[Schuyler]

March on Washington 1963:
The March on Washington was a political movement of about 250 000 people, mostly blacks, who were fighting for jobs and especially freedom. There Martin Luther King has delivered his historic “ I have a dream..” speech advocating racial harmony.
An excerpt from his speech:
“I have a dream that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the colour of their skin but by the content of their character.”

Selma, Alabama 1965:
In 1965, King came to Selma to lead three marches in protest to against discrimination in voter registration.
Two times [Twice klingt besser] they had to turn back: the first once because of violence violent resistance of by police and the second again at a the request of King. The last march had his its [vergiss nicht, englische Dinge haben kein Geschlecht -- wir sagen "it"] intended effect and a new voting rights act was passed.

[Weil dies Satz vielleicht mit allen den Korrekturen zu verwirrend aussieht, die korrekte Version lautet: "Twice they had to turn back: once because of violent resistance by police and again at the request of King." Du kannst auch "first" und "second" anstatt "once" and "again" schreiben, aber das klingt ein klein bisschen komisch.]

Martin Luther King:
Martin Luther King was a pastor in [from klingt besser] Montgomery, Alabama with a strictly strict faith. He pursuits pursued the goal that blacks and whites could live in peace and equality and sermonize [würde eher sagen: preached oder encouraged] a non-violent resistance. [Ich würde auch vielleicht against the current laws am Ende hinzufügen, damit alles klar ist.]
In 1955 King was elected to the president of the Montgomery Improvement Association (MIA) and led his first demonstration: the ”Montgomery Bus Boycott”. This was the his beginning point as the foremost leader in the Civil Rights Movement. During this period of time, he was more than 30 times in captivity more than 30 times.

The climax of his movement was “The March on Washington” with his “I have a dream" speech, where he got a lot of attention world-wide.
One year later in 1964, Martin Luther King received the Nobel Peace Prize for his work to end racial segregation and racial discrimination through non-violent protests [oder resistence].
In 1968, King was assassinated in Memphis.

Opponent of Martin Luther King’s movement:

Malcom X:

Malcom X, born as Malcom Little, wasn’t a real opponent of Martin Luther King, but he had strongly criticised the non-violent resistance.
Malcom X's goal was an independent state for blacks only. To reach his aim, he wasn’t baulk of wouldn't balk at violence. ”Let’s make war,” he said.

The Ku-Klux-Klan:

The Ku Klux Klan [hat normalerweise kein Bindestrich, und ich habe persönlich nur "the KKK" und "the Klan" als Spitznamen gehört, nicht "Ku Klux"] was a secret militant organisation founded by veterans of the Confederate Army whose aim was to resist social change and black’s efforts the effort of blacks to improve their lives.
They reacted to the Civil Right Movement with by bombing houses, setting buildings on fire, or murdered and murdering activists.

Today’s situation:
Immigrants from the whole world [all around the world klingt besser] are in the USA.
Different ethnic groups work together in the same jobs and a lot of black’s blacks have great positions in their firm.
Since 2009, Barack Obama is has been the first African American President of the United States.
But it gives there is still racial discrimination: [erinnere dich: "es gibt" wird in Englisch mit "there is/are" übersetzt]
Black men who are employed only earn 74% as much as white men.
16,5% of the black male population had has been to prison, compared to 2,7% of the white male population
For Black’s blacks, the death rate from gunshot wounds is nine time higher than the rate of for whites.

Ist das auch lesbar mit allen den "[ ]'s"? Wenn es schwer zu verstehen ist, kann ich die Kommentare nur am Ende schreiben und nicht zwischen den Sätzen / Worten.

Dein Englisch ist nicht so schlecht -- ich verstehe dich und die meisten Fehler sind nur ziemlich klein. Ich bin mir total sicher, mein Deutsch hat auch viele Fehler drin und ich hoffe, du kannst mir dafür vergeben. ^^

[tiorthan]

Weil dieser Satz mit all den Korrekturen vielleicht zu verwirrend aussieht; die korrekte Version lautet: "Twice they had to turn back: once because of violent resistance by police and again at the request of King." Du kannst auch "first" und "second" anstatt "once" and "again" schreiben, aber das klingt ein klein bisschen komisch.
Das "vielleicht" habe ich etwas nach hinten verschoben weil "dieser Satz mit all den Korrekturen" eine Einheit bildet und es besser klingt, wenn man diese Einheit nicht trennt.

Bei diesem Semikolon bin ich mir nicht ganz sicher, aber da der vorangehende Teil praktisch ein eigenständiger Satz ist, ist ein Komma hier (meiner Meinung nach) nicht ausreichend.

hat normalerweise keinen Bindestrich, und ich habe persönlich nur "the KKK" und "the Klan" als Spitznamen gehört, nicht "Ku Klux"]

[denke daran: "es gibt" wird in Englisch mit "there is/are" übersetzt]

In English you use remember for everything one has to remember but in German you have the option to use "an etwas denken". That one's more common for things like rules or appointments. In fact in your sentence here, "erinnern" sounds weird.

mein Deutsch hat auch viele Fehler drin

Kleinigkeiten.

[Nickname28]

Hallo nochmal,
ich habe meinen Vortrag noch etwas erweitern müssen,  hier wäre ich auch wirklich sehr dankbar wenn jemand nochmal darüber lesen könnte.
Civil War (1860-1865):

In the 19[sup]th[/sup] century the northern and southern states had a different conception of political, economic and social questions, especially slavery.
Slavery was allowed in the states were it existed, although most northern states were against it.
After Abraham Lincoln has been voted for president in 1860 the civil war broke out, because slave advocates did not want to recognise the avowing opponent of slavery as president. Southern states left the Union and founded the Confederate States of America.
In the following civil war the south fought for independence, the defence of their territory and the preservation of the slavery. However the north fought for the unity of the nation, the abolition of the slavery and the emancipation of the slaves.
In 1865 the northern states were victorious in the civil war, they persevered the union and released four million slaves.
The African American slaves were free now, but in 1876 the Jim Crow Era was starting which permitted racial segregation in public facilities.
The Supreme Court declared in 1896 that the black African Americans are “separate but equal”
but the places for blacks were of inferior equality. Moreover whites Democrats were passing laws to make voter registration and elections more restrictive for the Blacks. 

[Schuyler]

Civil War (1860-1865):

In the 19[sup]th[/sup] century, the Northern and Southern states had a different conception views of political, economic and social questions, especially slavery.
Slavery was allowed in the states were where [oder vielleicht eher: in which] it existed, although but most Northern states were against it.
After Abraham Lincoln has been was voted for in as president in 1860, the Civil War broke out because slave advocates did not want to recognise the avowing avowed opponent of slavery as president. Southern states left the Union and founded the Confederate States of America.
In the following Civil War, the South fought for independence, the defence of their territory and the preservation of the slavery. However, the North fought for the unity of the nation, the abolition of the slavery and the emancipation of the slaves.
In 1865, the Northern states were victorious in the Civil War; they persevered the Union and released four million slaves.
The African American slaves were free now, but in 1876, the Jim Crow Era was starting started, which permitted racial segregation in public facilities.
The Supreme Court declared in 1896 that the black African Americans are were “separate but equal,” but the places for blacks were of inferior equality quality. Moreover, whites white Democrats were passing laws to make voter registration and elections more restrictive for the Blacks blacks.