Abi Hilfe

[FainT]

Hallo,

ich bereite mich zurzeit auf mein Abitur vor, welches ich in einigen Wochen schreiben werde. Ich bin im Englisch LK und hatte in letzter Zeit eher schlechtere Texte abgegeben und wollte mich hier mal nach Tipps und Korrekturen umschauen. Danke im Voraus

The text is an excerpt from the novel "A Clock Without Hands" by Carson McCollers, published in the USA in 1961. It treats the clash of two different cahracters who discuss the relevance of segregation while they eat dinner. The plot is set in a small town in the American South during the time of segregation a mid-summer day in 1961.

The two main characters, Jester and old Judge, are sitting in the dining room, after the cook opened the shutters and rang the bell as a sign to have dinner, at 2 o'clock. The house is surrounded by trees, flowers and the lawn, represented in the brightness of the sun. The author gives an image that they belong to the upper class, or at least are prosperous, since they have a personal servant.
Firstly, the atmosphere is descrribed as tranquil. Further on it obtained tensioned because of the oppositeness which arised among the two characters, the author depicts a challenge as being "plain as a loaded pistol across the table.

Das waere ein erster Textauschnitt, bei Bedarf könnte und würde ich gerne noch weitere Ausschnitte posten.

Danke

[Delfino]

Hallo,
ich bereite mich zurzeit auf mein Abitur vor, welches ich in einigen Wochen schreiben werde.
Ich bin im Englisch LK und habe in letzter Zeit eher schlechtere Texte abgegeben.
Daher wollte mich hier mal nach Tipps und Korrekturen umschauen.

Danke im Voraus


The text is an excerpt from the novel "A Clock Without Hands" by Carson McCollers. It was published in the USA in 1961,
and its plot is set in a small town in the American South during the time of segregation on a mid-summer day in 1961.
The story focuses on the clash of two different characters who discuss the relevance of segregation while they are eating dinner.

After the cook had opened the shutters, he had rang the bell as a sign to have dinner.
Now the two main characters, Jester and old Judge, are sitting in the dining room.
The house is surrounded by trees, flowers and the lawn.
Everything is presented in the brightness of the sun.
The author describes an environment which indicates that these men are part of the upper class or at least prosperous as they have a nice house and at least one servant.

In the beginning, the atmosphere is described as tranquil.
Further on it obtained tension, due to the disagreement between the two characters.
The author depicts their conflict as being "plain as a loaded pistol across the table.

[Delfino]

Hallo,
ich bereite mich zurzeit auf mein Abitur vor, welches ich in einigen Wochen schreiben werde.
Ich bin im Englisch LK und habe in letzter Zeit eher schlechtere Texte abgegeben.
Daher wollte mich hier mal nach Tipps und Korrekturen umschauen.

Danke im Voraus


The text is an excerpt from the novel "A Clock Without Hands" by Carson McCollers. It was published in the USA in 1961,
and its plot is set in a small town in the American South during the time of segregation on a mid-summer day in 1961.
The story focuses on the clash of two different characters who discuss the relevance of segregation while they are eating dinner.

After the cook had opened the shutters, he had rang the bell as a sign to have dinner.
Now the two main characters, Jester and old Judge, are sitting in the dining room.
The house is surrounded by trees, flowers and the lawn.
Everything is presented in the brightness of the sun.
The author describes an environment which indicates that these men are part of the upper class or at least prosperous as they have a nice house and at least one servant.

In the beginning, the atmosphere is described as tranquil.
Further on the coversation gained tension, due to the disagreement between the two characters.
The author depicts their conflict as being "plain as a loaded pistol across the table.

Please remember the English prefer short and concise sentences.