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[hallo123]

Hallo,
aus Übungsgründen habe ich einmal ein Kommentar auf Englisch geschrieben. Bitte helft mir mein Englisch zu verbessern und achtet auf Satzbau, Zeit sowie Ausdrucksweisen.

Thema:"Should the fashion Industrie Regulate Underweight Models?)

Its a well-known problem that the fashion Industrie influence particularly the teenagers. Therefore the fashion industry should make rules to save the youngsters for underweight?
But everyone is responsible for himself, so designers should be allowed to design fashion, which is correct in their mind without limitation.
The modern fashion stands for uniqueness. That is why designer shouldn't get prohibition, everything else were to blanket their artistic liberty.
But not all should be allowed. The moste girls has models as their example. So they're very easily to influence. But the size zero trend is very dangerous,
often the youngsters don't know, that the pictures out of the magazines are always improved.
In conclusion you can say it is very important to save the kids and implement laws.

Sind circa 125 Wörter.

Schon mal vielen Dank im Voraus.

[Delfino]

Should the fashion industry regulate underweight models?

It's a well-known problem that the fashion industry influences us and teenagers in particular.
Therefore, the fashion industry should make rules to prevent underweight in youngsters, right?
On the other hand everyone is responsible for himself, and designers should be allowed to design fashion () without limitation.
Modern fashion stands for uniqueness.
Therefore, designers shouldn't be regulated, because everything else would have an impact on their artistic liberty.
Altough we cannot allow everything.
Most girls have beauty ideals based on (fashion) models, and they're influenced very easily.
The size zero trend is very dangerous, because youngsters don't take into account that virtually all the pictures shown in magazines are digitally enhanced.

In conclusion one can say that it is very important to protect the children and implement some legislation.