Motivation Letter, brauche Hilfe bei der Fehlersuche

[Michael.E.S.]

Hallo,

ich hab den Motivation Letter gerade geschrieben, bin mir aber sicher, dass sich einige Fehler eingeschlichen haben. Wäre toll, wenn Ihr mal einen Blick draufwerfen könntet. Danke!!

Motivation Letter

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am highly ambitioned to seize the opportunity to broaden my knowledge in Counseling Psychology and to get in contact with a foreign culture, therefore I would like to study in the M.Sc. Counseling Psychology Program at .... I plan to stay abroad from the ... till the ... to take three trimesters during this time span.
am deeply interested in counseling psychology and this would be a reasonable addition to the curriculum in the M.Sc. Business Psychology at my home university in .... During my stay abroad I expect to learn more about ... and .... I am eager to learn more about specific techniques in Counseling Psychology and want to incorporate this knowledge into my studies.
Since my emphasis in my current M.Sc. Program lays on interculturality I would like to take the chance to learn more about non-western societies and hopefully I will be able to make many enriching experiences which will help to build up links to the learned theories and to be able to make use of those experiences in the professional life and to provide those to others. I try to accomplish my aim to work as a corporate consultant in an intercultural context and I am convinced a deeper understanding of these intercultural themes is a crucial point.
I chose ... for my study visit because of the obvious cultural differences and because I want to take the possibility to study counseling psychology abroad because related Programs are offered rarely in Germany. Another reason why I chose this specific place is that the classes in the M.Sc. Counseling Psychology Program will be held in the evening hours thus I will be able to do an internship as well. I intend to do an 3 month internship at .... It is another another occasion to gain insights in the field of intercultural counseling. The company is specialized in consultancy for German and European companies in ..., offering such services as strategy advisory, marketing and distribution, company foundation and intercultural trainings. I would appreciate it if you're going to consider my application.

With Kind Regards

[Delfino]

Hallo,

ich habe gerade dieses Motivationsschreiben geschrieben. Ich bin mir sicher,
dass sich einige Fehler eingeschlichen haben.

Es wäre toll, wenn Ihr mal einen Blick draufwerfen könntet. Danke!!


Motivation Letter


Dear Sir or Madam,


I am highly motivated to seize the opportunity to broaden my knowledge in counseling psychology and to get in contact with a foreign culture.

Therefore, I would like to study in the MSc Counseling Psychology program at ....

I plan to stay abroad from the ... till the ... to take three trimesters during this time span.

I am deeply interested in counseling psychology and this would be a reasonable addition to the curriculum in the MSc Business Psychology at my home university in ....

During my stay abroad I expect to learn more about ... and .... I am also eager to learn more about specific techniques in counseling psychology and to incorporate this knowledge into my studies.

Since my emphasis in my current Master's program lies on interculturality I would like to take the chance to learn more about non-western societies.

Hopefully, I will be able to gain enriching experience which will help me to apply the learned theories in my professional life.

I am aiming to work as a corporate consultant in an intercultural context, and I am convinced a deeper understanding of these intercultural themes is a crucial point.

I chose ... for additional studies due to the obvious cultural differences and because related programs are rarely offered in Germany.

Another reason why I chose your University is that the classes for the MSc Counseling Psychology will be held in the evening hours thus I will be able to do an internship as well.

I intend to do an 3 month internship at ....

This company is specialized in consultancy for German and European companies in ..., offering such services as strategy advisory, marketing and distribution, company foundation and intercultural trainings.

So I see it as another opportunity to gain insights in the field of intercultural counseling.

Thank you for taking the time to consider this application,
and I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.

Yours sincerely,

Michael ...

You start without mentioning how the opportunity arose,
your eligibility or how you come to know about it...

In case you want to set your letter (structure) appart from the masses
consider the

Why How What model
http://dalethoughts.com/2012/01/why-how ... r-success/

counseling psychology is not capitalised unless you refer to
the name of a specific course, lecture / unit, degree ...

Kindest Regards,
...

The English and American prefer to use shorter sentences.
It's highly recommended to also read other motivational letters
written in English to get a more natural sounding result.

I don't mind helping you as this letter needs some more rewriting
to be as polished as it should be given its importance for your career.

Please feel free to be insired by other letters in this forum and elsewhere online.
You can submit another draft for correction afterwards.