Biografie in Englisch - Verbesserungsvorschläge :-)

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Mari919

Biografie in Englisch - Verbesserungsvorschläge :-)

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Hey ihr, ich habe eine Biografie in Englisch für meinen Freund geschrieben. Er ist DJ.

Nun habe ich die Bio schon zig Male durchgelesen…. aber irgend etwas gefällt mir noch nicht daran… Ich weiss aber nicht was!!! :|

Wäre lieb wenn einige von euch sich kurz die Zeit nehmen würden und sie mal durchlesen.. :read: Ich hoffe ihr könnt mir weiterhelfen! :-)


LG :wink:




NAME is DJ from the village X in the east of Belgium.



At an early age he took notice of the techno scene and this awoke his enthusiasm for this kind of music. A lack of interest in the electronic music would be inconceivable for him later on.

At the age of 12, he got the necessary equipment and started ambitious with mixing.



Two years later he already tried out DJing for the first time while establishing an “All-round-DJ-Team” with some friends. Furthermore he got in touch with some experienced DJs from the region, and exercised with them the proper dealing with turntables once a week after school class. And so, it didn’t take long until he was arranging a good atmosphere with first short guest-sets on birthdays or private parties.



But this kind of DJing didn’t satisfy him, his excitement rested still on the electronic music. At the age of 17, he decided to start a solo project, initially with a preference for the genres Techno and Hard-Techno.



In the stretch of 2005 to 2010, he organized his first own party series, the “Evolution One”, in his hometown. With this series of events he obtained a lot of positive feedback that motivated him additionally.



In 2008, he discovered his fascination for House, Tech- and Deep-House and began mixing these styles. He still sticks to his guns.



During the years he decided to switch from the good old vinyl to digital DJing.



In 2010, he hosted already his second party series, the “Underground Party”. This time with another concept: less people, smaller location and with great value upon details. His target was thereby to pass over an understanding for his passion and to enthuse still more people for the electronic music.



Genres: Tech-House, House, Deep-House, Minimal.

Mari919

Re: Biografie in Englisch - Verbesserungsvorschläge :-)

Beitrag von Mari919 »

Niemand der mir helfen kann??? :-( schade…


Ausserdem habe ich gerade selber einen Fehler entdeckt - sofort im ersten Satz : "...is A Dj" natürlich. Das hat sich so mit dem Kopieren eingeschlichen.

tiorthan

Re: Biografie in Englisch - Verbesserungsvorschläge :-)

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Könntest du dazu eine Übersetzung anfertigen, damit man sehen kann, was du meinst? Für mich ergibt nicht alles direkt einen Sinn.