letter of motivation

Sätze und kurze Texte, die korrigiert wurden
b4rty

letter of motivation

Beitrag von b4rty »

hallo zusammen, ich bin gerade dabei mich für eine Uni in den USA zu bewerben und dafür brauch ich ein Motivationsschreiben. Es ist das erste mal, dass ich eins in englisch verfasse und ich habe einfach mal losgelegt. Schreibt mir bitte was ihr davon haltet - was soll noch rein, was soll raus? Und wo sind die ganzen Fehler? :-)

Vielen Dank schon jetzt!

Dear Sir or Madam,

The wish to study abroad appeared several times during my study of electrical engineering, unfortunately it is never happened. I regret that I, till now, never took the chances for an international exchange. Today I am writing to you, because I am more determined than ever to realize my plans.

A stay in a foreign country is a unique experience, which let grow your personality in an incomparable way. To organize your living on your own in a new country with a different culture is a great challenge that I am ready to accept. Many friends visited already international universities and have grown in maturity and independence.
Obviously the best opportunity to learn the English language it is to visit an English-speaking country like the United States of America.


I chose to study in USA since it is the most interesting state outside from Europe and that for different reasons: The way of life and the way of thinking is different. In USA is a great optimism, everybody thinks positively and through that everything is possible. I like that. Additionally international students in the United States tell that the American citizens are so open-hearted and helpful, that a lot of friendships will arise in a short time.
The USA is just a proud country with a significant history, an influential policy and great economy. The most successful companies as well as the most renowned universities are settled in USA and that makes the country so attractive.


With this letter of motivation I want to apply for the University and Professional Studies Program in spring quarter 2015 at University of California in San Diego. It is settled in California, one of the economical most powerful and multifaceted states in USA. The UCSD has an excellent reputation, belongs to the best state universities of the country and offers a multiplicity of courses. The good education guarantees great new knowledge around my chosen courses.
The experiences of international students of the UCSD proof, that the university and its environment are perfect for a good learning.


Me as an open-minded person will integrate quickly in student life at UCSD. My previous results and courses at my home university Hochschule Niederrhein should indicate that I am a disciplined and determined student. I think that is an important base to start at an ambitious university. I hope I could convince you to give me the chance I am reaching for. I would be an honor to represent the UCSD as an international student.

Keswick (Contributor)

Re: letter of motivation

Beitrag von Keswick (Contributor) »

b4rty hat geschrieben:hallo zusammen, ich bin gerade dabei mich für eine Uni in den USA zu bewerben und dafür brauch ich ein Motivationsschreiben. Es ist das erste mal, dass ich eins in englisch verfasse und ich habe einfach mal losgelegt. Schreibt mir bitte was ihr davon haltet - was soll noch rein, was soll raus? Und wo sind die ganzen Fehler? :-)

Vielen Dank schon jetzt!

Dear Sir or Madam,

I have had the wish to study abroad appeared several times during my study of electrical engineering, unfortunately I haven't been able to fulfill this wish yet. I regret that until now, I haven't taken the chance to participate in an international exchange. Today I am writing to you because I am more determined than ever to realize my plans.

A stay in a foreign country is a unique experience, which can grow your personality in an incomparable way. To organize your living on your own in a new country with a different culture is a great challenge that I am ready to accept. Many of myfriends have already visited international universities and have grown in maturity and independence. Obviously the best opportunity to learn the English language it is to visit an English speaking country like the United States of America.

I chose to study in the USA since they arethe most interesting place outside ofEurope and this is based on different reasons: The way of life and the way of thinking is different. The USA hasa great optimism, everybody thinks positively and through this optimistic attitudeeverything is possible. I like that. Additionally international students in the United States tell that the American citizens are so open-hearted and helpful, hence a lot of friendships will developin a short time.
The USA is just a proud country with a significant history, influential politics
and a great economy. The most successful companies as well as the most renowned universities are settled in the USA and that makes the country so attractive.

With this letter of motivation I would liketo apply for the University and Professional Studies Program in spring quarter 2015 at University of California in San Diego. The universityis settled in California, one of the economicallymost powerful and multifaceted states in the USA. The UCSD has an excellent reputation, and belongs to the best state universities in the country and offers a multiplicity of courses. The good education guarantees great new knowledge around my chosen courses.
The experiences of international students at
the UCSDproves that the university and its environment are perfect for a good learning.

Me as an open-minded person will integrate quickly in student life at theUCSD. My previous results and courses at my home university, theHochschule Niederrhein should indicate that I am a disciplined and determined student. I think this can be considered an important base to start at an ambitious university. I hope I could convince you to give me the chance I am reaching for. I would be an honor to represent the UCSD as an international student.

b4rty

Re: letter of motivation

Beitrag von b4rty »

Vielen Dank! Habe schon einige der Fehler ausgeräumt und umformuliert und feile jetzt noch weiter dran :)