What is with this text?

[thepool]

Hallo,

ich sollte einen Text schreiben in dem ich meine Meinung zu Computern ausdrücke. Finde ich sie gut oder schlecht, was sind ihre Vor- und Nachteile?
Kann mir bitte jemand den Text auf Satzbau, Zeitform, Rechtschreibung kontrollieren?
Bitte nicht unbedingt auf den Inhalt achten, bei dem Thema war fast das größte Problem auf die geforderte Wortzahl zu kommen...

Danke vorab!


When we talk about computers we have to ask what a computer exactly is. Do we talk about the little computer in a watch or about the computer in a washing machine or the computer with I´m writing this text?

Computers are in the most of electronic devices but often the specialist’s don´t call it “computer”, they call it “microcontroller”. A personal computer (PC) like on the picture below is produced with many “microcontrollers”. In this text I´m talking about the personal computer.
I think PC´s are very good for people. On the one hand people are saying computers are killing jobs. Before some years many secretaries were needed in an office. Today there are only few secretaries in an office because many jobs are making by computers. On the other hand new jobs with computers were established. For example the job of a computer programmer or computer specialist.

Also with computers we make many pursuits particularly and faster. For example without computers it was an extreme hard and long work to design a new building or a machine. With special computers and computer software it is easier. The constructer don´t have to calculate every little think. The computer does it and also he shows any problems on a screen.
In the privacy computers are also useful. They are use for playing videogames and writing texts and store pictures.
The world is connected by the Internet and every people with Internet and a computer can write or talk with everyone. Also people can send files around the world.

Today you can control the stereo equipment, the heating, the light or the window shade with a normal personal computer.
Last but not least, the computer is also good for the environment. Before the computer was invented all documents were written on paper. Today the most documents are only in digital form. Because of that people use less paper than before.

At the end I can say the computer was a very important invention of the mankind. This invention took the mankind to the digital period. But the invention of the computer is not finished. In the future computers will be faster and smaller than today.

[Keswick (Contributor)]

Hallo,

ich sollte einen Text schreiben in dem ich meine Meinung zu Computern ausdrücke. Finde ich sie gut oder schlecht, was sind ihre Vor- und Nachteile?
Kann mir bitte jemand den Text auf Satzbau, Zeitform, Rechtschreibung kontrollieren?
Bitte nicht unbedingt auf den Inhalt achten, bei dem Thema war fast das größte Problem auf die geforderte Wortzahl zu kommen...

Danke vorab!


When we talk about computers we should ask ourselves first what a computer exactly is. Do we talk about the small computer in a watch or about the computer in a washing machine or the computer I am writing this text with?

Computers can be found in the most of electronic devices but often the specialists don't call them “computer”, they call them “microcontroller(s)”. A personal computer (PC) like on the picture below is produced using a number of “microcontrollers”. In this text I will talk about the personal computer.
I think PC's are very good for people. On the one hand people say that computers are taking jobs off humans. For example, until a few years ago, many secretaries were needed in an office. Today there are only a few secretaries in an office because many jobs have been taken over by computers. On the other hand new jobs where computers are being used were established. For example the job of a computer programmer or a computer specialist.

Also with computers can significantly speed up some processes. For example before computers designing a new building or a machine was an extremely difficult and long process. With special computers and computer software this is easier. The builder don't have to calculate every little detail. The computer does it for them and also he shows any potential problems on a screen. In personal life, computers are also useful. They are used for playing videogames and for writing texts and for storing pictures.

The world is connected by the Internet and every person with internet access has the option to write or talk with everyone. Also people can send files around the world.

Today you can control the stereo equipment, the heating, the light or the window blinds with a normal personal computer.
Last but not least, the computer is also good for the environment. Before the computer was invented all documents were written on paper. Today the most documents come only in digital form. Because of that people use less paper than before.

Finally I can say the computer was a very important invention for the mankind. This invention took the mankind into the digital age. But the invention of the computer has not finished. In the future computers will be faster and smaller than today.

[tiorthan]

Eine Sache solltest du noch korrigieren:

Before the computer was invented all documents were written on paper. Today the most documents come only in digital form. Because of that people use less paper than before.

Man könnte das vermuten, aber leider ist das nicht so, Der Paperverbrauch pro Kopf ist auch nach dem Siegeszug der Computer mit nahezu der gleichen Geschwindigkeit gestiegen, wie zuvor. Es scheint erst in den letzten Jahren (mit Smartphones und Tablets) ein deutlicherer Effekt spürbar zu sein (genau kann man das noch nicht sagen, da noch aussagekräftige Zahlen fehlen) aber wir sind noch nicht bei einem Rückgang des Verbrauchts angekomen, denn der Versandhandel verbraucht immer mehr Papier.