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American Native Church, also called peyote-church and peyotism was created by indians in Oklahoma and is widespread independent religion in the United States. It is called peyote-church because the consumption of peyote plant belongs to everyday life. The church was built from combinations of traditional Indians and Christians. Peyote has previously been used for communication with the supernatural and medicine. The tribes Karankawa, Tonkawa and Lipan-Ache learned the consumption of the peyote plant and contributed4 a part of more widespread. They learned the plant and know the consumption by residents of southern Texas and northern Mexico and in the 19th century the peyote religion spread. 1890 became the 40-year old John Wilson the founder of “modern” peyotism. The modern peyotism is the combination of Indian religious ideas with Christian ideas. Music, rituals and beliefs are part of the everyday life of the follower. The Office of Indian Affairs "BIA" and Christian missionary societies tried from 1886 to 1932 to fight the peyotism. From 1899 to 1937 was finally in 14 U.S states the consumption of peyote prohibited. The follower of peyotism was in 1940 again allowed the consumption of peyote. They teamed up in 1918 in Oklahoma together to the Native American Church. Between 1960 and 1979 the law has been in six trials awarded to consume the cactus in their religious rituals and to use. The peyote religion is now practiced by more than 50 Native American tribes in the U.S. and has 100000-300000 members. The exact number of members was never announced.




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Ich hab mir mal ein beliebiges Thema ausgesucht und ein Summary geschrieben.

Da ich mich in Englisch verbessern will (momentan 8 Punkte) schreib ich Texte zum Üben.


The American Native Church, also called Peyote Church and Peyotism were founded by Indians in Oklahoma and is now a widespread independent religion in the United States. It is called Peyote Church because the consumption of the Peyote plant is part of everyday life. The church was formed by traditional Indians and Christians. The Peyote plant has previously been used for communication with the supernatural and as a medicine. The tribes Karankawa, Tonkawa and Lipan-Ache learned the consumption of the Peyote plant and contributed4 a part of more widespread. (das macht keinen Sinn! Aus anderem Text kopiert, daher die Fussnote? Falls ja baue es sinnvoll in deinen Text ein) They learned about the plant and about the consumption of it by residents of southern Texas and northern Mexico and in the 19th century the Peyote religion spread. 1890 became the 40-year old John Wilson the founder of “modern” peyotism. (Google Translate? Bitte korrigieren) The modern Peyotism is the combination of Indian religious ideas with Christian ideas. Music, rituals and beliefs are part of the everyday life of the follower. The Office of Indian Affairs "BIA" and Christian missionary societies tried from 1886 to 1932 to fight the Peyotism between 1886 and 1932. From 1899 to 1937 was finally in 14 U.S states the consumption of peyote prohibited. The followers of peyotism was in 1940 again allowed the consumption of peyote. They teamed up in 1918 in Oklahoma together to the Native American Church. Between 1960 and 1979 the law has been in six trials awarded to consume the cactus in their religious rituals and to use. The peyote religion is now practiced by more than 50 Native American tribes in the U.S. and has 100000-300000 members. The exact number of members was never announced. (Google Translate? Bitte korrigieren)




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