Korrektur eines Textes !!

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jana.ned

Korrektur eines Textes !!

Beitrag von jana.ned »

Hallo Leute :D :P

Ich sollte einen Text auf Englisch schreiben, und ich wollte euch Fragen was für Verbesserungen oder Vorschläge ihr dazu noch hättet. Großes Danke !!!!

If I had to pay attention to my energy consumption, I would not use as much energy as I do now. The first thing I would change is that I would use water efficiently. It takes a lot of energy to heat water , so I would take a shorter shower. The next thing I would change is that I would not take the bus to school anymore. Instead of the bus I would use my bike or if i had to go somewhere i would also use my bike. The next thing I would do is that I would not watch TV anymore or use the computer, only when I have to do something for school. I should also turn off the heating if it is not absolutely necessary. Instead of turn on the heating i can wear warm clothes or use a blanket.

Keswick (Contributor)

Re: Korrektur eines Textes !!

Beitrag von Keswick (Contributor) »

jana.ned hat geschrieben:Hallo Leute :D :P

Ich sollte einen Text auf Englisch schreiben, und ich wollte euch Fragen was für Verbesserungen oder Vorschläge ihr dazu noch hättet. Großes Danke !!!!

If I had to pay attention to my energy consumption, I would not use as much energy as I do now. The first thing I would change is that I would use water efficiently. It takes a lot of energy to heat water, so I would take a shorter showers. The next thing I would change is that I would not take the bus to school anymore. Instead of the bus I would use my bike or if I had to go somewhere I would also use my bike. The next thing I would do is that I would not watch TV anymore or use the computer, only when I have to do something for school. I should also turn off the heating if it is not absolutely necessary. Instead of turning on the heating I could wear warm clothes or use a blanket.