Bewerbung für eine Gastfamilie...korrigieren erwünscht !!!

[Sunnyboy95]

Hallo Leute ich wollte mich für eine Gastfamilie bewerben. Da ich mich aber nicht komplett blamieren möchte, wollte ich euch fragen ob ihr mal drüber schauen könnt und es verbessert. Außerdem will ich hervorheben, dass ich körperlicher Arbeit nicht schlimm finde und auch neue Arbeiten, da ich sehr lernfähig bin, aber auch mit Leute gut zurecht komme, aufgrund meiner Erfahrung als Kellner und Verkäufer wo man sehr viel mit Menschen Kontakt hat. DANKE !!! .



Hello my name is XYZ. I’m 18 years old and live with my mum and my dad in XYZ a little village with 25.000 people . I visit the 13th class of a commerical school. 3 year latein and a 4 years english knowledge. I’m good at the economy area.
I love the english language, but I’m unsure in my grammar and in my pronunciation.
This is one reason why I want to improve my english in a other country
In my freetime I play American Football since 2 years, go to the gym and sometimes i go boxing.
But i make not only sports in my freetime. Every Wednesday i work in a youth centre and play games with the kids, help them with the homework, read with them and sometimes we cook together but my cooking is not so good I snip the things.
Every friday and saturday I go to my sideline. I work as a vendor in a Outdoor Store.
The work as a vendor was not my only Job.
I started to work as i was 15 as a waiter in a cafe for 1 year. If i was 16 1/2 i work in office as a general drudge for 6 Months. After this i work in a Outdoor Store since 1 year.
I am a really friendly, cofident and hardworking. My friends say that I’m always in a good mood and a open-minded person.
They also tell me that I’m very social and friendly, because I like to help people and I’m happy to see them do better.
So I want to experience new things and i were perfect for you.
Regards

[Delfino]

Hallo Leute,
ich werde mich bei einer Gastfamilie bewerben. Da ich mich aber nicht komplett blamieren möchte,
wollte ich euch fragen ob ihr mal drüber schauen könnt und es verbessert. Außerdem will ich hervorheben,
dass ich körperlicher Arbeit nicht schlimm finde und auch neue Arbeiten, da ich sehr lernfähig bin,
aber auch mit Leuten gut zurecht komme, aufgrund meiner Erfahrung als Kellner und Verkäufer
wo man sehr viel mit Menschen Kontakt hat. DANKE !!! .



Hello, my name is XYZ. I’m 18 years old and live with my mum and my dad in XYZ, a small town with 25.000 inhabitants.
I am in the 13th grade at a commercial school. Therefore, I gained a good understanding of economy and among other subjects
I attended classes in English for 4 years and Latin for 3 years. Although I love the English language, I hope my confidence
in using English gramar and the correct pronunciation will improve during my stay with you. This is one of the (main) reasons
why I'd like to spend some time in a foreign country.

Was sind die anderen Gruende?

In my leisure time I've been playing American Football for 2 years. I also go to the gym and occasionally do a little boxing.
But my fitness is not the only thing that is important to me. Every Wednesday I work at a youth centre.
The kids and I read and play games together. I also help them with their homework, and sometimes we cook together.
My cooking skills are still limited, so I usually help by cutting the ingredients.

I started working as a waiter at cafe when I was about 15. I had this part-time job for about a year.
Afterwards at the age of 16 1/2, I was employed in the office of a general store. Half a year later
I moved on to working in an outdoor store, which I've been doing on fridays and saturdays for a year now.

I see myself as a friendly, hardworking and confident person. My friends say that I’m open-minded and always in a good mood.
They also tell me that I’m very social and easy to get along with, because I like to help people, and I’m happy to see them do better.

I don't mind physical work as I'm in good shape. I also enjoy gaining experience by trying out new things,
and I can easily adapt to a different environment. My work involved direct contact with many different people
which I handled well. So I feel I'd be perfect for you.

Kindest regards,
(your name)

mit 25 000 Einwohnern ist es doch schon eher eine kleine Stadt...

doing a line on the side - could be understood as taking drugs

[Delfino]

Dear host family,

I am looking forward to staying with you and I wanted to tell you a bit about myself before we meet.
...

Thank you very much for your interest in my application!
I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours Sincerely,
(your name)


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