interessante Kurzgeschichte / short-story

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Manuel1705

interessante Kurzgeschichte / short-story

Beitrag von Manuel1705 »

Hallo zusammen,

muss für Englisch eine Kurzgeschichte entwerfen und die bald abgeben. Ich hoffe sie gefällt euch und wenn ihr einen Fehler seht, dann bitte ich euch ihn mittels einer Antwort auf mich aufmerksam zu machen! Freue mich auch über Verbesserungsvorschläge o.Ä.!
The meeting
Franklin gets off his car and strolled to the entrance door. He opened the door of the fast food restaurant and was looking for Maria, his sister. They haven’t met since two years. When he realized that she noticed him, he gets a bit nervous. He walked in front of her and tried to whisper “Hi” but he was a bit depressed because Maria was the one that interrupted their contact. “I´m sorry for not calling you back, but I hope you understand why.” Franklin instantly knows why because he got in trouble because of his criminal activities and that’s why they stop to hold contact for the last two years. He is a super large and professional drug dealer, but Maria is the only one from his family and his friends that knows that. For the other ones he is a successful banker and that’s why they think he makes a lot of money. “I wanted to ask you for money because my husband is ill again and I can´t earn enough as a charwoman.” “Sure, no problem, you know that I haven´t to care about money. Is it the blood cancer again?” Maria looks depressing: “Yes, and Tom is totally downcast. He is everything I have.” She began to cry on Franklins shoulder. “I´m so sorry for you. I hope he makes it again and I will surely pay the bills from the hospital. Give him the best medical treatment.” Maria stops crying and says quietly: “Thank you Franklin, even that you earn your money on a bad way you still have a good heart.” “Ok but now you have to go, not that anybody notices that we have contact again. And please, Maria, please call me back sometimes. I promise, I will stop being criminal and start a normal life.” But suddenly Franklin got afraid, but he doesn´t know why. Maria looks up to his face and whispered tearful: “I`m sorry Franklin, please forgive me.” The door got smashed in and three specially armed police officers aimed on Franklin. Another police officer from the outside spoke through the siren: “Franklin Marshall. Put your hands on the head and go down on your knees. I repeat: Put your hands on the head and go down on your knees.” Franklin looked very soothes and doesn´t move. Like nothing happened, he said to Maria: “If you want to keep some of the money, it´s hidden in the garden, in the old house in Cranfield where we grown up. I would rather die than go to prison. I had a good life, thank you for everything.” With these words, Franklin put his hand in his pocket, took out a gun and shoots himself in the head.

Danke & LG!

joy

Re: interessante Kurzgeschichte / short-story

Beitrag von joy »

Hallo zusammen,

muss für Englisch eine Kurzgeschichte entwerfen und die bald abgeben. Ich hoffe sie gefällt euch und wenn ihr einen Fehler seht, dann bitte ich euch ihn mittels einer Antwort auf mich aufmerksam zu machen!
Freue mich auch über Verbesserungsvorschläge o.Ä.!
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The meeting


Franklin gets off got out of his car and strolled to the entrance door of a fast food restaurant. He opened the door and was looking for Maria, his sister. They haven’t hadn’t met since for two years. When he realized that she noticed him, he gets got a bit nervous. He walked in,stopped in front of her and tried to whispered “Hi”. but he was He felt a bit unsure and depressed because Maria was the one that interrupted their contact. “Oh, it’s you”, Maria said in amazement, “I´m sorry for not calling you back, but I hope you understand why.” Franklin instantly knowsknew why understood what she meant, namely because that he got in trouble because of by his criminal activities, and that’s why they she had stopped to hold keep contact for the last two years. He is a super large great and professional drug dealer, but Maria is the only one from his family and his friends who knows had known that. For the other ones he is a successful banker, and that’s why they think he makes a lot of money.

I wanted to ask you for money” said Maria to Franklin,because my husband is ill again and I can´t earn enough as a charwoman cleaner.” Franklin, who is always willing to help, answered, Sure, no problem, you know that I haven´t to care about money. Is it the blood cancer again?” Maria looks depressing depressed, and said, “Yes, and Tom is totally downcast. He is everything I have.” She began to cry on Franklins shoulder. Franklin felt a great pity for her. “I´m so sorry for you. I hope he makes it again and I will surely pay the bills from the hospital. Give him the best medical treatment.” Maria stopped crying and says said quietly, “Thank you Franklin, even that if you earn your money on a bad way you still have a good heart.” “Ok but now you have to go, not that anybody notices that we have contact again. And please, Maria, please call me back sometimes. I promise, I will stop being criminal and start a normal life.” But suddenly Franklin got afraid, but he doesn´t didn’t know why.

Maria looks looked up to his face and whispered tearfully, “I`m sorry Franklin, please forgive me.” The door got smashed in, and three specially armed police officers aimed their weapons on at Franklin. Another police officer from the outside spoke through the siren over the loudspeaker: “Franklin Marshall. Put your hands on the head and go down on your knees. I repeat: Put your hands on the head and go down on your knees.” Franklin looked very soothes calm and doesn´t didn’t move. Like As though nothing had happened, he said to Maria, “If you want to keep some of the money, it´s hidden in the garden, in the old house in Cranfield where we grown grew up. (Hoffentlich hat die Polizei nichts gehört) I would rather die than go to prison. I had a good life, thank you for everything.” With these words, Franklin put his hand in his pocket, took out a gun and shoots shot himself in the head.

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