Würde mich über eine Korrektur freuen!

[ThomasLuno]

Hallo,


ich würde mich sehr über eine Verbesserung des folgenden Textes freuen:



More and more people shop online. There are many different Online-Shops like Amazon or Zalando . Is online shopping betther than shopping by local retailers?


In the internet I can very easy compare the many different shops and prices. With one click I can compare the prices at Search-Engines like Idealo or Google. Another big advantage of online shopping is the large selection. In the internet i have a bigger choice than by local retailers and sometimes is online shopping cheaper than in a supermarket or by a local retailer. In the internet I can shop when ever I want.


On the other hand is it a big problem when all people shop online, because the local retailers become big problems and going down.


In conclusion I think online shopping is the betther way to buy things. Because its very easy, sometimes cheaper than local retailers, I can shop when ever I want, in the internet I have a large selection and I can easy compare the many different prices.


Viele liebe Grüße und herzlichen Dank

[brian f]

Hallo,


ich würde mich sehr über eine Verbesserung des folgenden Textes freuen:



More and more people shop online. There are many different Online-Shops like Amazon or Zalando . Is online shopping betther than shopping by local retailers?

Doing business with local retailers. Bei does not translate as by.
Besser = better


In the internet I can very easy compare the many different shops and prices. With one click I can compare the prices at Search-Engines like Idealo or Google. Another big advantage of online shopping is the large selection. In the internet i have a bigger choice than by local retailers and sometimes is online shopping cheaper than in a supermarket or by a local retailer. In the internet I can shop when ever I want.

Im Internet = on the Internet
Compare the many different shops and prices very easily.
Bigger choice than what is on offer at local retailers.
Sometimes online shopping is cheaper.


On the other hand is it a big problem when all people shop online, because the local retailers become big problems and going down.

Bekommen does not equal become.
Try, because the local retailers experience big problems and can go to the wall. (Pleite gehen)
In conclusion I think online shopping is the betther way to buy things. Because its very easy, sometimes cheaper than local retailers, I can shop when ever I want, in the internet I have a large selection and I can easy compare the many different prices.


Viele liebe Grüße und herzlichen Dank

I have made some suggested changes. The German word bei never translates as by. Usually "with" or "at" fits the bill. Also, English does not use "in" for im radio, im Internet, im Zug.

Try to avoid repeating the same word several times in the same paragraph. It sounds so much more native-like if you use a selection of different words with the same meaning.

[ThomasLuno]

Vielen herzlichen Dank. Hat mir sehr geholfen