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[Alex2468]

Hallo erst mal!! Ich wollte mich für nächstes Jahr in England um einen Praktikumsplatz bewerben und habe auch endlich ein Anschreiben fertig, weiß aber nicht genau ob alles richtig ist. Es wäre echt nett wenn einer drüber gucken könnte. Vielen Dank im Voraus





Dear Sir or Madam

At the moment, I visit the Higher Vocational School for trade and e-commerce in XYX, which I will leave in 2014 with the vocational baccalaureate diploma.

In order to gain practical experience in an economic sector, I wish to perform a three-month internship. I would like to apply at your company from 4th August, 2014 to 7th November, 2014.

For a long time I had deep interest in economic issues and operational processes. For this reason, I decided after general certificate of secondary education to visit a Higher Vocational School to educate myself in the economic area. With the visit of the Higher Vocational school for trade and E-Commerce I only get the theoretical part of the vocational baccalaureate diploma, to get the full qualification, I have to do a three month internship in an economical sector. During my internships at XYX GmbH and at XYX GmbH Germany, I was able to gain experience in various economic sectors. Special emphases have been the accounting, shipping and quality control. I show a lot of initiative, am reliable, willing to learn and willing to perform.

I am convinced to fully meet your needs and to start working with commitment and responsibility. My skills I will use for the benefit of the company and its customers

I look forward to hearing from you.

[Delfino]

Dear Sir or Madam,

In order to gain practical experience I would like to apply for a three-month internship
at your company - preferably from 4th August until 7th November, 2014.

Currently, I attend the Higher Vocational School for Trade and E-commerce in XYX
from which I will graduate with a vocational baccalaureate diploma in 2014.

I have been interested in economic issues and operational processes for a long time.
Therefore, I decided to attend a higher vocational school to increase my knowledge
about economics after gaining my general certificate of secondary education.

My theoretical education has been complemented by my previous internships at
XYX GmbH and at XYX GmbH in Germany
which allowed me to focus on accounting, shipping and quality control. However,
another three months internship in business is required to gain my vocational baccalaureate diploma.

I show a lot of initiative, am reliable, willing to learn and willing to perform.
I am convinced to fully meet your needs and to start working with commitment and responsibility.
My skills I will use for the benefit of the company and its customers

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

At the moment you are reading my reply to your post.
There is a big difference between a visitor and a student who attends school.
A doctor can perform an operation, but you cannot perform an internship.
Although your performance during the internship may exceed expectations.
A x y school is not capitalised as this is a normal noun and not a name.

The above text is not a perfect application - just an improved version of your text
which has been corrected apart from the italic paragraph.

May I suggest you read the following material and check/rethink/rewrite your letter.

See also
http://portal.solent.ac.uk/careers/your ... ccess.aspx

http://portal.solent.ac.uk/careers/jobs ... ments.aspx
http://portal.solent.ac.uk/careers/jobs ... ships.aspx
http://portal.solent.ac.uk/careers/jobs ... ering.aspx


PS: You can post the next version of your drafted letter in a new thread,
so we can have another look...

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