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[selinalightus]

Hallo,
wir sollen in Englisch einen Tagebucheintrag schreiben und eigentlich bin ich ganz gut in Englisch, jedoch habe ich Schwierigkeiten mit Zeiten und bei diesem Text besonders meine Ideen korrekt umzuformulieren.
Wäre echt super lieb, wenn mir da jemand sagen könnte, was ich falsch gemacht habe.

Liebe Grüße und Dankeschön im voraus, Selina.


Hier der Text:

Dear Diary,
I'm listening to the rain falling against my window. The unopened letters are well settled. My dreams are fighting against the reality on my walls and on the ceiling the questions are spreading.
What will be if I went away? What will be if I pack my things and move out of this town? On what shall I remember, on what shall I hold on, when everyday here is only good to forget about it. You don't have to be a saint or a prophet to see that nothing is going on for me.
And if i move away, simply over night, I leave this country and don't cry one tear for it.
I'm gonna pack all the important things and sell the rest and the only thing I let here is a letter on which is written:
"I'm forever away. This is no goodbye on time, this is forever."

[Delfino]

Hallo,
wir sollen in Englisch einen Tagebucheintrag schreiben und eigentlich bin ich ganz gut in Englisch,
jedoch habe ich noch Schwierigkeiten mit der Verwendung der Zeitformen und insbesondere bei diesem Text
meine Ideen korrekt auszudrücken.
Es wäre echt super lieb, wenn mir jemand sagen könnte, was ich falsch gemacht habe.

Liebe Grüße und Dankeschön im Voraus,
Selina.
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Hier der Text:

Dear Diary,

I'm listening to the rain falling on my window. Unopened letters are pushed aside.
My dreams are fighting against the reality on my walls and on the ceiling.
Some questions are asked again and again.

What would happen if I went away?
What would be the result if I pack my things and move out of this town?
What shall I remember?
What shall I hold on to, when it seems better to forget every day I spent here?

You don't have to be a prophet to see that there is really nothing going on for me here.
And what if I simply move away over night, if I leave this country and don't shed a tear over it?

I could pack the few important things and just sell the rest.
The only thing I'd leave here is a note which says:
"I'm gone away forever.
So, this is goodbye, finally.
Farewell."

Go and see the world for yourself...