English letter

[ycd1231]

Ich wollte mit einer Brieffreundschaft anfangen.
Ich würde mich über Feedback sehr freuen.
Hier mal mein Versuch:

It's my first time that I write a letter to a foreign land. It's a little bit strange.
First of all I introduce myself, my name is (Name)and I'am 18 years old but I will be 19 on 9.October. I want to study economy in a few months but I save my money now, so that I can rent a little appartment .My favorites hobbies are playing fotball, basketball and watching movies.
What's your favorite movie ?
I do not hear a special genre of music what about you?
I have registred at (Adresse) because I want to improve my English skills and I want to discover other cultures. I hope we can become penpals so I hope you will write back to me soon.


Best wishes from Germany


xyz

[The Doctor]

Ich wollte mit einer Brieffreundschaft anfangen.
Ich würde mich über Feedback sehr freuen.
Hier mal mein Versuch:

This is the first time that I have written a letter to another country. It's a little bit strange.
First of all I would like to introduce myself, my name is (Name)and I am currently 18 years old and I will be 19 on the 9th of October. I want to study economy in a few months, but I am currently saving my money now so that I can rent a little apartment. My favorites hobbies are playing football, basketball and watching movies.
What's your favorite movie ?
I do not listen to a specific genre of music, what about you?
I have registered at (Adresse) because I want to improve my English skills and I want to discover other cultures. I hope we can become penpals. so I hope you will reply to me soon.


Best wishes from Germany

Hello ycd1231

Very well done on your first attempt! I have made some corrections that hopefully will help you make improvements. Please feel free to contact me if you want any further advice.

Kind regards,

The Doctor