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Hallo, Es wäre sehr lieb wenn sich jemand den Brief durchlesen könnte und korrigieren könnte. dieser Brief ist zur bewerbung um eine Aupair Stelle.


Dear host family!

My name is ***. I come from *** which is a town in north Germany. I live there with my Family in a house with a big garden. My mother *** works in primary school as a housemistress. My father ***** work as a butcher. My older sister *** is only on the weekends at home because she works in another town.

I have a good relationship to my Family, especially to my sister. Sometimes we play games together. Also I have a very good relationship to my Grandparents. Whenever I want I can come to them. In the summer we barbecue often with my Grandparents. When my family visit us I like to cook for them with my father.
I have three younger cousins. We have always a lot of fun together. Sometimes there are quarrel between the sibling but we resolve the problems together.

In my free time I like doing sports or meeting friends. Two days a week I go to the fitness studio. In the summer I love inline skating in the nature. Also I spent a lot of time with my care horse. The riding-stable is in a village next to Bremen. I can reach it in 15 minutes by bike because we live on edge of town. In the holidays and sometimes on the Weekends I worked at a restaurant. I learnt not only how serve people but also how to handle problems.

I finished high school last month. Now I would like to do something new.

It was always a dream of mine to live and work in a foreign country. The main reason why I want to become an au pair is that I like to be with children. Every day happen something new when you spent time with Children. Another reason is the language. I would like to improve my English because English is the most important language all over the world.

Another significant point is that I living together with a family. I think it is the best way to learn something about the culture. Furthermore I hope that I become a good relationship to my host family and see a lot of her country.

Last year I did a practical training at a kindergarten for two weeks. There were 15-20 children at the age of 3 to 6 and I helped the housemistress to supervise the group. We played games, ate together, sang songs, did handicrafts, read out for the kids and played in the garden every day. I enjoyed these weeks and it was a helpful experience for me to care for so many kids at the same time.

I also did a practical training in primary school in the third class. There were 18 pupils at the age of 9 to 10. I support the teacher and helped the pupil by problems.

Once a week I coach a group in gymnastics exercises. I instruct games and took care of the Children. In the group are 15-18 at the 6 to 10. It is a nice feeling when the children are proud of herself because they learn something new.

I hope you got a good impression of me and if you are looking for a reliable and motivated au pair to take care of your children I would be happy if you choose me as your au pair.



I am really looking forward to hearing from you soon!



Yours sincerely

[Delfino]

Hallo,
Es wäre sehr lieb wenn sich jemand den Brief durchlesen könnte und korrigieren könnte.
Dieser Brief dient zur Bewerbung um eine Aupair-Stelle.


Dear host family,

My name is ***. I come from *** which is a town in the north of Germany.
I live there with my family in a house with a big garden.
My mother *** works as housemistress in a primary school.
My father *** works as a butcher.
My older sister *** comes home only on weekends,
because she works in another town.

I have a good relationship with my family,
I'm especially close to my sister.
Sometimes we play games together.
Also I have a very good relationship to my grandparents.
I can come to them whenever I want.
In the summer we barbecue often with my grandparents.
When relatives visit us I like to cook for them with my father.
I have three younger cousins.
Although we quarrel sometimes, we always resolve our problems quickly,
and we also have a lot of fun together.

In my free time I like doing sports or meeting friends.
Two days a week I go to the fitness studio.
In the summer I love inline skating in the local parks.
Also I spent a lot of time with my care horse.
The riding-stable is in a village near Bremen.
Using my bike I can reach it in 15 minutes,
because we live on the edge of our town.
During the holidays and sometimes on weekends I worked at a restaurant.
I learned not only how serve people but also how to handle problems discreetly.

I finished high school last month.
Now I would like to do something new.