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[o0Sophie0o]

Ich muss in meiner Aupair Bewerbung einen kurzen Text über meine Karrierevorstellungen in den nächsten 10Jahren schreiben. Es wäre wirklich lieb wenn jemand mal drüber lesen könnte weil meine Betreurin meinte das ich ihn nochmal überarbeiten soll. Jetzt weiß ich aber nicht weiter und kenne auch niemanden in meinem Umfeld der gut Englisch kann um mir zu Helfen What career I tax in the next 10 years?
First I want to enjoy the year in America, what comes afterwards I do not know exactly, since it now only dreams and wishes are that I have and a lot can happen in that year. I would like for my year in America I look for in a city that I do not know a work. The mountains have always been very pleased with
it myself and I could imagine to live in München.
There I would love to work in an integrative kindergarten and still do a course in sign language.
Important for me is that I definitely want to work together with children, because it was always my dream, I've also makes it possible with my educator training

[Delfino]

Ich muss in meiner Aupair Bewerbung einen kurzen Text
über meine Karrierevorstellungen in den nächsten 10Jahren schreiben.
Es wäre wirklich lieb wenn ihn jemand einmal korrekturlesen könnte,
weil meine Betreurin meinte dass ich ihn nochmal überarbeiten soll.
Jetzt weiß ich aber nicht weiter und kenne auch niemanden in meinem Umfeld
der gut Englisch kann, um mir zu helfen.

What are your career plans for the next 10 years?

Firstly, I would like to enjoy my year in America.
During my time as an au-pair I would like to work in a city.
Although I am open for nearly everything I would prefer an area
(by the sea or) near the mountains as I enjoyed my time there
in the past.

Therefore, I can see myself living in Munich, Germany in the future.

It was always my dream to work with children, and therefore,
I would love to work in an integrative kindergarten using my
knowledge and my skills gained during my educator training and
if possible continue my education with a course in sign language.

Currently, I do not have any specific plans for my professional future,
but I know that my time abroad will broaden my horizon and thereby
influence my dreams, my goals and my priorities in general.

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[o0Sophie0o]

Vielen lieben Dank für die schnelle Antwort. Es hat mir super weitergeholfen
Viele Grüße Sophie