Bewerbung verbessern

[Mechatro7]

Guten Tag.
schreibe gerade eine Bewerbung und zu dieser Bewerbung wurde ein Fragebogen hinterlegt, den habe ich jetzt auch beantwortet und möchte gerne wissen ob die sätze richtig geschrieben (Ausdruck,Fehler,Zeichen usw...) sind. danke für eure hilfe


Hier der Fragebogen

What does this Canadian manufacturer do for its customers?
1. The Canadian manufacture offers an industry competitive compensation package for their customers. The package includes a reward for their efforts and the unique opportunity to grow your abilities alongside this growning division.

Which duties of this engineering technician do you consider most important?
2. I think the most important duties are prepare and maintain drawings by customers and sales department, reviewing specifications of contract and create and maintain databases for assitsting in design and costing.

Do you think you would meet any of the requirements? Which would be difficult for you?
3. I think the most difficult requirement for me is to work with Solidworks or AutoCad, because these programs are for draw up mechanic drawings and I come from the electrical department. In my study I learn only the basic knowledge for these programs.

For a job interview, present your mechatronics background: What are your specific skills?
4. Befor I visit the technical college, I work in an iron factory. I appropriate many practical skills of the mechatronic technician. My specific skills are programming of Siemens S7 control systems, analysis of
electrical schematics and work with pneumatics system. During my technician studies I improve my specific skills.

After graduating from technical college, what are your career prospects and plans now?
5. After I have graduating my mechatronic technician, the first think, I will try to find a job near my hometown. Near my hometown are many factories like Mustermann, xyz and xyz. I see a good chance to find a job nearly. If I don’t find a job nearly, I will try it in Mustermannstadt or Stadtmustermann. I think with the techinican graduating, we have new possibility in the world of work. Therefore the chance to find a good job is higher.

[Delfino]

Guten Tag.
ich schreibe gerade eine Bewerbung und zu dieser Bewerbung wurde ein Fragebogen hinterlegt,
den habe ich jetzt auch beantwortet und möchte gerne wissen ob die Sätze richtig geschrieben (Ausdruck, Fehler, Zeichensetzung usw. ...) sind.
Danke für eure Hilfe!


Hier der Fragebogen:

What does this Canadian manufacturer do for its customers?
This question asks about the products and services provided to customers
and not to employees.
1. This Canadian manufacturerer offers an industry competitive compensation package for their customers.
The package includes a reward for their efforts and the unique opportunity to grow their abilities alongside this growing division.


Which duties of this engineering technician do you consider most important?
2. I think, the most important duties are

• to prepare drawings for the sales department,
• to maintain drawings by customers,
• to review the specifications of contracts, and
• to create and to maintain databases that can assist in design and costing.

Do you think you would meet any of the requirements? Which would be difficult for you?
3. I think, the most difficult requirement for me is to work with Solidworks or AutoCAD,
because these programs are used to create mechanical drawings, and I come from the electrical department.
During my studies I gained only knowledge of the basic functions of these programs.

For a job interview, present your mechatronics background: What are your specific skills?
4. Before I attended the technical college, I worked in an iron factory.
I acquired many practical skills that are useful for a mechatronic technician.
My skills include the programming of Siemens S7 control systems, the analysis of electrical schematics, and I also worked with pneumatics systems.
During my studies I have been increasing my knowledge and understanding based on these specific skills.

After graduating from technical college, what are your career prospects and plans now?
5. After my graduation as a mechatronic technician, I will try to find a job near my hometown.
Fortunately, there are many factories for instance Mustermann, and Musterfrau.
Therefore, I see a good chance to find a job nearby.
If I do not find a job near my hometown, I will apply in Mustermannstadt or Stadtmustermann.
I think, there are many new possibilities for graduates of this technical college.
Therefore, the chance to find a good job is high.

The English and Americans prefer shorter sentences.

[Mechatro7]

Super danke, das du das so schnell verbessert hast.

Info für mich, falls ich sowas nochmal machen muss.
lieber kurze Sätze, anstatt lang und ausführlich schreiben.



danke nochmal

[Delfino]

Ich hoffe du hast dir eine neue Antwort zur ersten Frage überlegt,
da deine Anwort die gestellte Frage nicht beantwortet.

Du kannst natürlich ins Detail gehen. Aber ich würde dir empfehlen lange Satzverbände,
die durch Kommas strukturiert sind, in einfache kürzere Sätze aufzuteilen.
Damit erleichterst du dem Leser das Verständnis und vermeidest Fehler bei der Zeichensetzung.

[Mechatro7]

Ich informier mich noch zur Frage 1



Find die kurze Schreibweise richtig gut, das hat mir auch das lesen erleichtert. das werde ich so übernehmen