Hallöchen Ihr,
ich versuche gerade ein Bewerbungsschreiben für einen Freiwilligendienst auf Englisch zu schreiben.Leider merke ich mal wieder das sich mein Schulenglisch nicht wirklich verbessert hat und ich viele Sätze nicht ins Englische übertragen kann bzw. meine Grammatik ,befürchte ich, nicht so gut ist.
Es wäre wirklich lieb,wenn mal jemand drüberlesen würde : )
Firstly I am very interested in other cultures and different ways of living, which is why I am interested in doing voluntary work abroad.On the way I hope to improve my social and language skills.
Moreover I like the idea of make myself useful and live in a foreign country on my own.
By "weltwärt" (kann ich einen Einblick abseits vom Tourismus bekommen) by becoming a part of society and and I want to learn more about their manners and problems .
Furthermore I have an interest at a developing country as a host country,because I am convinced that we have auch menschen
Supporting local organization is in my opinion the best possibility to cause something,because sie sind nah am Geschehen "
Since my childhood I like it staying in nature .Therefore I prefer a project with environment , because it is importent for me not only watching our planet becoming destroyed, but doing active something against.
But I am also interested at the other projects and open to all countries.
Being many yeary classmate I learned to stand up for our interest,and to mediate between different attiudes .
Even I am not socially commited at a association, engagiere ich mich persönlich .
Im Rahmen des Projektes kann ich während des "Dienstes" meine persönlichen Fähigkeiten einbringen und durch die sozialen Kontakte zur interkulturellen Verständigung beitragen .
Durch die Teilnahme kann ich auch zu Hause etwas bewirken, indem ich andere Menschen für die Probleme in für uns fremde Länder sensibilisiere und mein Erfahrungen weitergebe. .Dabei kann ich mir gut vorstellen kleine Projekte wie beispielsweise eine Fotoserie durch zu führen.
Nach dem Freiwilligenjahr überlege ich Lehramt Biologie und Geschichte zu studieren und hoffe daher dass der Freiwillgendienst mir hilft mich beruflich zu orientieren.
Bwerbungsschreiben Freiwilligendienst
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Delfino
Re: Bwerbungsschreiben Freiwilligendienst
Bäumchen hat geschrieben:Firstly, I am very interested in other cultures and their different ways of living, which is the reason for my big interest in participating in voluntary work abroad.
On the way, I hope to improve my social and language skills.
Moreover, I like the idea of making myself useful and living on my own in a foreign country.
The volunteer service weltwärts will allow me to widen my horizons beyond the limits of tourism by becoming a part of society, and I want to know more about their problems and customs.
Furthermore, I have an interest in developing countries as a host country, because I feel that we are all humans, and we should treat each other that way.
Supporting a local organisation is in my opinion the best possibility to have a positive impact, and it enables the direct change of some things.
Since my childhood I have been enjoying spending time outside in nature.
Therefore, I would prefer an environmental project, because it is important to me that we do something against the increasing destruction of our planet.
I am open to working in all countries, and I am also interested in other projects.
Being many yeary(???) classmate I learned to stand up for my views, and to mediate between different attitudes.
Although I am not part of any association, I engage in...
Im Rahmen meines Dienstes im Projekt würde ich gerne alle meine persönlichen Fähigkeiten einbringen und durch persönlichen Kontakt zur interkulturellen Verständigung beitragen.
Meine Teilnahme wird hoffentlich auch in Deutschland etwas bewirken, indem ich andere Menschen für die Probleme in uns fremden Ländern sensibilisiere und mein Erfahrungen weitergebe.
Dafür kann ich mir gut vorstellen kleine Projekte wie beispielsweise eine kommentierte Fotoserie durchzuführen.
Nach dem Freiwilligenjahr werde ich voraussichtlich Biologie und Geschichte auf Lehramt studieren.
Deshalb hoffe ich, dass mir der Freiwillgendienst hilft mich, beruflich zu orientieren.
The English prefer to use shorter sentences.You won't be able to communicate in German when you are working abroad. Therefore,
may I kindly suggest that you at least attempt to translate the second part yourself.
See also (phrases used in)
http://www.weltwaerts.de/service/downlo ... nie-en.pdf
Do not read the German version first!
http://www.weltwaerts.de/service/downlo ... nie-de.pdf
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Bäumchen
Re: Bwerbungsschreiben Freiwilligendienst
Thank you very much 
! Your comment was really helpful.
I corrected my text. Could you have a closer look at it?
Firstly , I am very interested in other cultures and their different ways of living, which is the reason for my big interest in participating in voluntary work.On the way, I hope to improve my social and language skills. I will acquire some international experience and qualifications that will be of help to my in my future lives.
Moreover, I like the idea of making myself useful and living on my own in a foreign country. The volunteer service weltwärts will allow me to widen my horizons beyond the limits of tourism by becoming a part of society, and I want to know more about their problems and customs.
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Furthermore ,I have an interest in developing countries as a host country because I am convinced that in a period of globalisation we have to look at each other having social
responsibility.
Supporting a local organization is in my opinion the best possibility to have a positive impact, and it enables the direct change of some things. Since my childhood I have been enjoying spending time outside in nature.. Therefore, I would prefer an environmental project, because it is important to me that we do something against the increasing destruction of our planet. I am open to working in all countries, and I am also interested in other projects .Giving private tuition trains my emphatic and is useful to get used to foreign countries.
. Being many years classmate I learned to stand up for views, and to mediate between different attitudes
Within the project I can incorporate my knowledge and skills.In addition socializing aims to contribute to international understanding.
Thereafter I could make an active contribution to development education
work in Germany because I could pass on my experience and sensitizes people to to the differences and problems of foreign. .
I can imagine that I run projects in my hometown .
After the voluntary service I think about studying teacher-training course ( Biology,Art History ) .Therefore I hope the year helps me to find out what direction I want to take later on.
! Your comment was really helpful.I corrected my text. Could you have a closer look at it?
Firstly , I am very interested in other cultures and their different ways of living, which is the reason for my big interest in participating in voluntary work.On the way, I hope to improve my social and language skills. I will acquire some international experience and qualifications that will be of help to my in my future lives.
Moreover, I like the idea of making myself useful and living on my own in a foreign country. The volunteer service weltwärts will allow me to widen my horizons beyond the limits of tourism by becoming a part of society, and I want to know more about their problems and customs.
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Furthermore ,I have an interest in developing countries as a host country because I am convinced that in a period of globalisation we have to look at each other having social
responsibility.
Supporting a local organization is in my opinion the best possibility to have a positive impact, and it enables the direct change of some things. Since my childhood I have been enjoying spending time outside in nature.. Therefore, I would prefer an environmental project, because it is important to me that we do something against the increasing destruction of our planet. I am open to working in all countries, and I am also interested in other projects .Giving private tuition trains my emphatic and is useful to get used to foreign countries.
. Being many years classmate I learned to stand up for views, and to mediate between different attitudes
Within the project I can incorporate my knowledge and skills.In addition socializing aims to contribute to international understanding.
Thereafter I could make an active contribution to development education
work in Germany because I could pass on my experience and sensitizes people to to the differences and problems of foreign. .
I can imagine that I run projects in my hometown .
After the voluntary service I think about studying teacher-training course ( Biology,Art History ) .Therefore I hope the year helps me to find out what direction I want to take later on.
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Delfino
Re: Bwerbungsschreiben Freiwilligendienst
Qualifications are the results of formal education.Bäumchen hat geschrieben:Firstly, I am very interested in other cultures and their different ways of living, which is the reason for my big interest in participating in voluntary work. On the way, I hope to improve my social and language skills.
I will gain some international experience and qualities that will be helpfulto mein my future [live/career].
Moreover, I like the idea of making myself useful and living on my own in a foreign country.
The volunteer service weltwärts will allow me to widen my horizons beyond the limits of tourism by becoming a part of society, and I want to know more about their problems and customs.
Furthermore, I have an interest in developing countries as a host country, because I am convinced that in a period of globalisation having social responsibility means we have to look out for each other.ftopic12562.html
Supporting a local organization is, in my opinion, the best possibility to have a positive impact, and it enables the direct change of some things.
Since my childhood I have been enjoying spending time outside in nature.
Therefore, I would prefer an environmental project, because it is important to me that we do something against the increasing destruction of our planet.
I am open to working in all countries, and I am also interested in other projects.
Giving private tuition trains my empathy (Does it need to be trained? Are you not feeling enough empathy now?) and is useful to connect with people in a foreign country.
In addition, socialising aims to contribute to international understanding.
Being my class spokesman for many years I learned to stand up for the views of others and to mediate between people with different attitudes.
Within the project I will incorporate my knowledge and skills.
Thereafter, I could make an active contribution to the education about development work in Germany, because I could pass on my experience and help trying to sensitise people to the differences and problems in foreign countries.
I can imagine myself running projects or events in my hometown.
I am also thinking about starting my studies on a teacher-training course (Biology, Art History) after the voluntary service.
Therefore, I hope the year abroad will help me to find out what direction I want to take later on.
What qualifications do you expect to acquire abroad? Buy some degrees?
... my future lives.
This sounds like you expect to have more than one life.
Although different careers are sometimes called a 'life as XY',
it doesn't feel right to use the plural here.
we have to look at each other ...
Look at my body and look me in the eyes!
emphatic speech -> adjective + noun
my empathy -> noun
Think about the structure of the content before dividing the text in paragraphs.