eine Art Motivationsschreiben

[Sarome7]

Ich bewerbe mich für Freiwilligenarbeit in Südafrika und muss in meinem Lebenslauf auch auf meine Motivation eingehen. Ich wäre sehr dankbar, wenn jemand meinen Text korrekturlesen könnte.


I am on the brink of leaving school and before I study or I do an apprenticeship, I want to see
more of the world. Since more than 3 years I would like to experience another culture and their people. Furthermore I want to get know their mentality and their way of live.
The reason why I use especially South Africa is collected with the football World Cub in 2010. I am an enthusiastic footballer and the World Cub in South Africa I found awesome. Therefore I started to become interested in South Africa and I noticed the beautiful countryside, but more important I saw the people appear really friendly and now I want to see this really interesting country with their impressive history.
The reason that I choose social work with kids is on the one hand that I self-evident like children in view of this fact I pass my practicum in the kindergarten. The work and of course the playing with kids make me much fun. Moreover my mum works as a social worker and in past she worked with kids having behavior problems. Today she often tells how much fun she had with the children and how she enjoyed this time and I would like to do similar experience. I don’t know what I want to study or work but I think social work is a field of work I am interested in and I hope the time with the children show if I would like to do such a work in future.


Liebe Grüße

[Delfino]

I am on the brink of graduating from school, but before I continue my formal education, I want to see more of the world to widen my horizons.
It has been my main wish for more than 3 years to experience other cultures and their people.
Furthermore, I want to get know their way of live.
The reason why I choose South Africa is connected to the Football World Cup in 2010.
I am an enthusiastic footballer, and I enjoyed the World Cup in South Africa.

Therefore, I started to become more interested in South Africa,
and I noticed the beautiful countryside,
but more important I saw the people appear really friendly,
and now I want to see this really interesting country with their impressive history.
You noticed the beautiful countryside (and the people ...) of South Africa.
Have you ever been there?

The reason why I choose social work with kids is that I like children.
It is self-evident as I pass my time volunteering at a local kindergarten.
Playing with the kids is fun.
Moreover, my mum works as a social worker and in the past she worked with kids who had behaviour problems.
Today she often tells me how much she enjoyed helping them.
I would like to gain similar experience.
Currently I am not exactly sure what I am going to study or where I am going to be employed in the future, but I know that social work is a field I am interested in.
I hope the time I will spend with the children will confirm my calling, and I will pursuit a related career.

You worked with children before, so why are you unclear about the career?

The English use shorter sentences. Break them up a bit.