The night was dark. It was cold. A man walked through the night. He had a dark knife in his hand. His target was a bus station. When he arrived there he sat down. And he waited. Nothing happened but he waited. He waited the whole night with his knife in hand. Nothing happened. There a light. A bus. The bus arrived at the station. A girl get off. The bus drove away. The dark man stand up. He had a smile on his face. He grapped the girl. The girl wanted to scream but he put his hand on her mouth. The girl hadn't got a chance against this man. He took the girl into an old and lonely house. Then everything was dark.
Everybody applauds. The last scene of the drama was done.
My first story :)
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tiorthan
Re: My first story :)
It is a bit strange to attempt to murder a bus station.Marly hat geschrieben:... His target was a bus station. ...
Tense corrections.A girl got off. ... The dark man stood up. He had a smile on his face. He grabbed the girl. The girl tried to scream but he put his hand on her mouth. The girl hadn't got a chance against this man. He took the girl into an old and lonely house. Then everything was dark.
Everybody applauded. The last scene of the drama was done.
And, I'd expect her to attempt to scream and not just want to do it.