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Letter of application - Korrektur

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Hallo :D

Ich wäre euch total dankbar, wenn sich jemand den Text durchlesen könnte und meine Fehler finden würde!


Dear Sir or Madam,

I am interested in applying for the post of a secretary which was advertised in the daily magazine on 09.12.2012. I think there are several reasons why I might be the right person for the job.

I am twenty-one years old and I am in my final year at evening school. I am planning to start a degree in Economy at Salzburg University in October 2013. In the meantime I would welcome the oppurtunity to gain some work experience.

My qualifications and experience make me particularly suitable applicant for this post. As you can see from my enclosed CV, i have three years experience in Word-processing, because I worked in an office.
In addition to this, I have learned Englisch and Italian for eight years.

I am generally considered to be outgoing, socialable, motivated and hard-working. I like working in a team an enjoy being with people. In the course of my present job, I have been responsible for the organisation for Events.

The advertisment mentions the fact that applicants need to be availale for four weeks between July and September. I would like to inform you that I am available at this time.

I will glady supply you with any further information you may need. Naturally I would be prepared to come to an interview at you convenience.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully

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joy

Re: Letter of application - Korrektur

Beitrag von joy »

Mariposa05 hat geschrieben:Hallo

Ich wäre euch total dankbar, wenn sich jemand den Text durchlesen könnte und meine Fehler finden würde!


Dear Sir or Madam, (Versuche, den Namen herauszufinden)

I am interested in applying for the post of a secretary which was advertised in the daily magazine of 09
December 2012. I think there are several reasons why I might be the right person for the job.

I am twenty-one years old and I am in my final year at evening school. I am planning to start a degree in economy at Salzburg University in October 2013. In the meantime I would welcome the opp
ortunity to gain some work experience.

My qualifications and experience make me particularly suitable applicant for this post. As you can see from my enclosed CV,
I have three years of experience in word-processing, because I worked in an office.
In addition to this, I have learned Engli
sh and Italian for eight years.

I am generally considered to be outgoing, socia
ble, motivated and hard-working. I like working in a team and enjoy being with people. In the course of my present job, I have been responsible for the organisation of events. (Ich würde im 2. Abschnitt noch erwähnen wo und was du gegenwärtig arbeitest)

As required in your advertis
ement, mentions the fact that applicants need to be available for four weeks between July and September. I would like to inform you that I am I will be available for four weeks between July and September.

I will glad
ly supply you with any further information you may need. Naturally I would be prepared to come to an interview at your convenience.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully

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