Motivationsschreiben :)

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Mena

Motivationsschreiben :)

Beitrag von Mena »

Hallo!

Ich bewerbe mich momentan für ein Auslandsstudium und schreibe deshalb ein Motivationsschreiben... Nur habe ich das noch nie gemacht und wäre dankbar über neuen Input und konstruktiver Kritik :)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to introduce myself as an appropriate candidate for a year abroad at the Bishop’s University in Sherbrooke and elucidate my motivation in detail.

I am currently studying International Business Administration (B.Sc.) in the third semester at the University of Bamberg. Academically, I have a broad interest in multilingual studies this drawn me down towards a business orientated degree which is linked to international relations. This course of studies does not only emphasize on business another central aspect is the comprehension of different cultures and languages. In the matter of contents my subject of study encompasses different academic sciences, such as marketing and human resource management.

Whilst staying seven month abroad in Australia, I experienced a very different philosophy of life. During this time, I worked as an Au Pair and as a waitress in both employments I got to know the Australian culture, as well as enlarged my English skills. Staying Down Under was a great time and I met a lot of interesting people from all over the world. As I never traveled beyond the Pacific Ocean I would love to get to know all about Canada and Canadian way of life. It has been always my greatest ambition to speak a second or even a third language fluently. I would love to seize the chance to study in English whilst living in the French speaking province Québec.

I expect from my study abroad a personal development. One of the main advantages of a cultural exchange is a better ability to understand different mindsets. I think it is important to have an open mind and give fellow students an understanding of someone’s own culture. Furthermore it is the challenge for every exchange student to reduce prejudices between different cultural backgrounds. I hope that I will develop such social competence during my studies at the Bishop’s University.

The Bishop’s University offers great opportunities to discover perspectives beyond the ordinary academic studies. Joining one of the many offered clubs reinforces a sense of community which is very important for me. Taking part in extracurricular activities will broaden my knowledge and improve my social skills. Additionally, taking courses of an average size of 22 students is a whole different learning experience than in Germany. To have personal contact to professors is very appealing. Thomas Fuller said “Knowledge is a treasure, but practice is the key to it.” and I am willingly to work hard for enlarging my academic expertise.

I am confident that through my academic knowledge, the international emphasis of my bachelor’s degree and my curiousness in regard to foreign cultures and languages, I am well suited for a year abroad at the Bishop’s University in Sherbrooke.

Yours sincerely,
Wie gesagt wäre ich sehr dankbar, wenn sich jemand mein Text mal durchliest,
liebe Grüße Mena

Delfino

Re: Motivationsschreiben :)

Beitrag von Delfino »

Mena hat geschrieben:Hallo!

Ich bewerbe mich momentan für ein Auslandsstudium und schreibe dafür ein Motivationsschreiben...
Nur habe ich das noch nie gemacht und wäre deshalb dankbar über neuen Input und konstruktive Kritik. :)


Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to introduce myself as an appropriate candidate for a year abroad at the Bishop’s University in Sherbrooke and elucidate my motivation in detail.

I am currently studying International Business Administration (BSc) in the third semester at the University of Bamberg.
Academically, I have a broad interest in multilingual studies which has drawn me down towards a business orientated degree that is linked to international relations.
This course of studies does not only focus on business issues, another central aspect is the comprehension of different cultures and languages.
In the matter of contents my area of study encompasses different subjects - including marketing and human resource management.

During my seven months in Australia, I worked as an Au Pair and as a waitress.
This allowed me to experience the Australian culture firsthand and gain an insight into their philosophy of life whilst also improving my English skills.
I really enjoyed my time Down Under, because I met a lot of interesting people from all over the world.
As I never traveled beyond the Pacific Ocean I would love to get to know all about Canada and the Canadian way of life.
It has been always my greatest ambition to speak a second or even a third language fluently. *
I would love to seize the chance to study in English whilst living in the French speaking province Québec.

I expect from my studies abroad a personal development and the ability to better understand different mindsets.
One of the main advantages of a student exchange program is the opportunity to share an understanding of someone’s own culture.
Furthermore, it is a challenge for every exchange student to reduce possible prejudices between different cultural backgrounds.
Therefore, I hope that I will be able to contribute to the development of social competence (of fellow students) during my studies at the Bishop’s University.

I read about the great opportunities to discover perspectives beyond the ordinary academic studies at your university.
Joining one of the many offered clubs reinforces a sense of community which is very important for me.
Taking part in extracurricular activities will broaden my horizon and improve my social skills.
Additionally, units tought with an average class size of only 22 students will provide a very different learning experience compared to Germany.
The direct contact to professors is also very appealing.

As Thomas Fuller said “Knowledge is a treasure, but practice is the key to it.” and I am willingly to work hard for enlarging my academic expertise.

I am confident that through my academic knowledge, the international emphasis of my bachelor’s degree and my curiousness in regard to foreign cultures and languages, I am well suited for a year abroad at the Bishop’s University in Sherbrooke.

Yours sincerely,


Wie gesagt wäre ich sehr dankbar, wenn sich jemand einmal meinen Text durchliest.

Liebe Grüße,
Mena


:watch: May I kindly remind you to review our Forum Rules which state

§ 6. Diskussionen sind grundsätzlich erwünscht.
Nicht erlaubt sind hingegen:
Cross Posting (Schreiben von gleichen Beiträgen in mehreren Foren)

and you know in which other forum you posted this text too.


Btw. I put each of your sentences in a new line to ease correction and highlight their length.
In general the English speaking people prefer to use shorter sentences.

* You didn't mention your French skills.