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Dear Diary,
today was a really serious day . I had to help mrs. Hancox . As I came to her house , I feel fear , because the house looks dangerous and I thought a killer live there or so. As I knock the door, I hear a woman´s voice and then I feel me better. It was mrs. Hancox and she wants some identification from me. I dont know why ? Do I look so dangerous? or what was the reason?. As mrs.Hancox open the door , I saw a very old woman who looks doesn´t so good . She wants that I come into the house. The house of her looks outside and inside ugly. I feel again fear as I saw the animals there and the character from mrs.hancox was also not so good. I don´t know why , but I think I have a problem with these old people or these old stuff which they have. I would say the reason for this thinking is that I´am a modern human and not like mrs. hancox a Person who live in a old house with old stuff. Now is the Question is my thinking right or not ?. I dont know at the moment , I have to find a solution. If my thinking is false , I have to change something on me!


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Danke schonmal im Vorraus :)


MfG. Nexes

ScottyBoy

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Nexes hat geschrieben:Dear diary,
today was a really serious day . I had to help Mrs. Hancox . As I came to her house , I felt fear , because the house looked dangerous and I thought a killer lived (oder: was living) there or something. As I knocked at the door, I heard a woman´s voice and then I felt better. It was Mrs. Hancox and she wanted some identification from me. I don't(didn't*) know why? Do(Did*) I look so dangerous, or what was the reason? As Mrs. Hancox opened the door, I saw a very old woman who looks doesn´t didn't look so good . She wanted for me to come into the house. The house of her Her house looked ugly outside and inside ugly. I felt again fear again as I saw the animals there and the character(behaviour?) from Mrs. Hancox was also not so good odd.
I don´t know why , but I think I have a problem with these old people or these old stuff things which they have. I would say the reason for this thinking(besser:feeling) is that I´am(I'm) a modern human and not like Mrs. Hancox, a person who lives in an old house with old stuff. Now is the question is, is my thinking right or not? I dont know at the moment, I have to find a solution. If my thinking is false , I have to change something about me!
Hallo Nexes!
Erinnerst du dich immer an die Zeitformen. Wenn man beginnt mit der Vergangenheit, man muss auch damit fortgehen. Und ebenso mit der Gegenwart. Sonst fängt man mit einem neuen Absatz an.

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