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Today there is a lot of discussion about teenagers should not have their own computers because it is too dangerous. In this comment I want to write about the advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly computers have many advantages for teenagers. They can be learn with it, research in the internet for a presentation, communicate with friends from the class, when they need help. Moreover it is be faster to research in the internet as research in a book. Another advantage it is safer as a book because you have many sources to compare the information are you read.
On the other hand computers distract the teenagers from his exercise. Many advertising in the internet tempt the user to visit this website. Another problem are computer viruses. Many users of the web want to manipulate or destroy the computer from others. It can be dangerous when you click on every link without thinking about it. To communicate with friend from class is an advantage but a disadvantage, too. They can be chat about other things that not topic in school.
But all in all computers can help teenagers despite all the dangers. In my opinion the parents can buy a good anti-virus program to make the computer safer. It blocks advertising and protects computers against viruses. Teenagers should have own computers.
