Schnellkorrektur meines Cover letters :-)

[Feybel]

Hey liebe Experten,

leider war ich noch nie so der "Englischspezialist", weshalb ich super dankbar wäre, wenn jemand einen kurzen Blick auf meinen Cover letter werfen würde. Kleinere Fehler müssen nicht unbedingt behoben werden, sollten sich aber größere Fehler eingeschlichen haben, so bitte ich um eine kurze Korrektur. Vielen, lieben Dank

"
Application for an internship in your company


Dear Mr. ____


My name is ___i, I´m ___ years old and I´m living in a German city called _____. Although it has always been my passion to take videos and produce films, I never really had someone to share this passion with. I already [successfully] produced some short films for various contests in the World Wide Web, but never worked together with professionals. In 2013 I would like to study “film” on the ‘Academy of Media Arts’ in Cologne wherefore I want to gain some experiences in form of an internship I hereby apply for.


I´m ambitious, very adaptive and able to work in a team; furthermore I´m familiar with the basic features of Adobe After Effects, Adobe Premiere Pro and Adobe Photoshop.
However, as you certainly already have seen I´m not a native English speaker, what, especially in the first weeks, may lead to little difficulties. I´m convinced, though, that, when conducting conversations in English only, I will make enormous progress with my faculty of speech.


The language is also my primary motivation for coming to Australia [again], besides the cultural experience and the wonderful mentality of the Australians. An internship at Pixelframe would certainly make my journey unforgettable.


I´ve got a working holiday visum and I´m available to start the internship at any time in the time frame from 01.10.2012 till 15.01.2013. I don´t expect any payments, I just want to have a nice time with like-minded people. If you are interested in a cooperation, feel free to invite me for an interview at any time.
I´m looking forward to hearing from you;
Sincerely,


Jan

[Delfino]

Warum glaubst du, dass man mit einem cover letter, der kleine Fehler enthält, erfolgreich sein kann?
Der Hinweis auf deine begrenzten Englischkenntnisse als Motivation wirkt sich auch nicht positive aus.

Application for an internship at your company


Dear Mr. ____ ,

My name is ___ , I'm ___ years old and I'm living in ___, Germany. Although it has always been
my passion to make videos and produce films,* I never really had someone to share this passion with.
I already successfully produced some short films for various contests on the Internet,
but never worked together with professionals. In 2013 I would like to begin my studies of Film at the
Academy of Media Arts in Cologne. Therefore, I hope to gain some work experience.

I'm tired...

* Du kennst hoffentlich den Unterschied zwischen ein Video drehen und einen Film produzieren.

You'll need to highlight your specific transferable skills
which you've gained throughout your life.

a guide, with examples of application forms, CVs and cover letters
http://portal.solent.ac.uk/careers/job- ... ccess.aspx

You should also think about what skills you want to gain in each job / industry
and what you can do to prepare yourself in Germany.

Read, listen and think - use the local library and the Internet...

Good Luck.

You might want to let someone check your next revision again.
May I recommend posting it in a new thread to keep it visible to everyone
in the "Unbeantwortete Themen" list.[/quote]