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Ich soll eine Art Tagebucheintrag verfassen und würde mich sehr freuen, wenn jemand drüber schauen würde! :)

A new, wild life“ - the first day of a North Korean student in freedom
Yesterday evening my family and I arrived at the airport in South Korea. We were very exhausted and tired. Nevertheless we were very amazed at the new environment. The aircraft were very modern and the whole airport building was fashionable. Also a lot of people were using their cellphone or laptop, this was a very new sight for us. My little brother, he is 3 years old, was kind of afraid of all the new things, but he will get used to them very quick I think. Today was our first real day in Seoul and we could not believe which things people have here. For example they have automatic soap dispensers or a numerous selection of fruits from all other the world. Besides that you can buy so much clothes and furnitures or funny things like a nail varnish in a monkey can. I am so excited! In the evening, we went to an amazing restaurant who served Italian meals, so delicious, and all the people were discussing about politics and the government. Our new world looks so up-to-day and progressive. I can not wait for the next days!

Delfino

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Ist in meinem Text alles richtig?
DiamantenFee. hat geschrieben:Ich soll eine Art Tagebucheintrag verfassen und würde mich sehr freuen, wenn jemand über meinen Text schauen würde! :)

A new, wild life“ - the first day of a North Korean student in freedom
Yesterday evening my family and I arrived at the airport in South Korea. We were very exhausted and tired. Nevertheless, we were very amazed by the new environment. The aircraft were very modern and the whole airport building was fashionable. Also a lot of people were using their cellphone or laptop, this was a very new sight for us. My little brother, he is 3 years old, was kind of afraid of all the new things, but he will get used to them very quickly, I think. Today was our first real day in Seoul and we could not believe what things people have here. For example, they have automatic soap dispensers or a numerous selection of fruits from all over the world. Besides that you can buy so many clothes and furnitures or funny things like a nail varnish in a monkey can. I am so excited! In the evening, we went to an amazing restaurant who served very delicious Italian meals, and all the people were discussing about politics and the government. Our new world looks so up-to-day and progressive. I can not wait for the next days!

DiamantenFee.

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Vielen Dank!! :)