Cover letter bitte korrigieren. Danke

[Lanyia]

Hallo,

ich möchte mich gerne für ein Job in der USA bewerben. Anbei mein cover letter, den ich vorher gerne korrigieren lassen würde. Ich bedanke mich im Voraus.




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August 17, 2012

Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to express my interest in a position as Clinical Data Manager for your company.

While much of my experience has been in the Clinical Research field, I understand the standards of quality and to be a part of in a multidisciplinary team.

Currently, as a Clinical Research Coordinator, I assist in clinical trials with medical devices. I am responsible for the subject recruitment as well as for the collection of relevant data in accordance with the protocol. Since I work with people every day in large clinical center, I have developed strong interpersonal and communication skills.

My teamwork experience, particularly with a lot of colleagues in a big hospital, is another example of my strong sense of responsibility and motivation. Due to my work as clinical research coordinator I am familiar with entering data into a CRF.

I would appreciate the opportunity of this great entry-level position to improve my clinical research experience and to learn about the field of a clinical data manager!


In all of my working experiences, my motivation and energy has ignited me to work hard and accomplish goal to work in the United States.

My resume is enclosed for your evaluation. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours faithfully,

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Enc.: CV

[Delfino]

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August 17, 2012(not sure, check American date format and address order in cover letters online)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to express my interest in a position as Clinical Data Manager at your company.

In my current positionas Clinical Research Coordinator, I [organise/assist in] clinical trials of new(?) medical devices.
I am responsible for the subject recruitment as well as the collection of relevant data in accordance with our protocols using CRFs.My work (at ...and ...) allowed me to gain a lot of experience in clinical research,
and I also ... the [compliance with/application of] quality standards in my multidisciplinary team.
Through my work with people on an every day basis in our large clinical center,
I have developed strong interpersonal communication skills.
I would appreciate the opportunity of this great entry-level position to built on my clinical research experience and to learn more about clinical data management! *

... inspired me to work hard and continuous to motivate me ...I am motivated by ...(to) accomplish my goal to work in the United States.

Please find enclosed my resume for your evaluation.
Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours faithfully,

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Enc.: CV (not sure, check it online)

* you are probably expected to know a lot about clinical data management alreadyYou said you understand ...
It's best to demonstrate your ability to do/apply something by providing evidence
that you did it before or at least something that required the same (transferable) skills.

Vermeide die wörtliche Übersetzung von deutschen Formulierungen/Gedanken:
my strong sense of responsibility and motivation
ignited me ... (du möchtest nicht entzündet werden)

avoid repetition of phrases/words
e.g. starting all paragraphs with: experiences

communicate your identification with your team/employers goals by using: ourWhen you post here, you may also cite at least the essentials of the ad and circumstances.
So we can get a better feel of your situation.

You'll need to highlight your specific transferable skills
which you've gained throughout your life.

a guide, with examples of application forms, CVs and cover letters
http://portal.solent.ac.uk/careers/job- ... ccess.aspx

You should also think about what skills you want to gain in each job / industry
and what you can do to prepare yourself in Germany.

Read, listen and think - use the local library and the Internet...

Good Luck.

You might want to let someone check your next revision again.
May I recommend posting it in a new thread to keep it visible to everyone
in the "Unbeantwortete Themen" list.