Tortilla Curtain Chapter 1

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Fireball

Tortilla Curtain Chapter 1

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Ich mache bald Englisch LK (nach den Ferien) und wir sollen ein Buch lesen und ich habe zum Beispiel Kapitel 1 zusammengefasst (von Tortilla Curtain) und es wäre gut, wenn jemand die Fehler korrigieren könnte .:)
Danke !:)

 
Chapter 1 Summary
This chapter clearly depicts the first action, taking place in this novel.
Delaney Moosbacher, described as a liberal humanist and writer, triggers an accident with his car where a Hispanic person is obviously hurt grievously.
Delaney wants to assist in helping him by attempting to talk in English. Although, he attempts it, it does not have much success owing to the matter that the man is not capable of comprehending English. Since the man has severe injuries, Delaney wants him to see a doctor but the man rejects seeing a doctor. Instead of visiting a doctor, he asks for money. Delaney is scared of getting into trouble, so that he gives him $20. After having given him money, he leaves for the recycling center, what he originally has been heading for. Delaney can not stop thinking of this incident and very soon, it seems to be apparent to him that the man, to whom he had spoken to, has to be one of the illegal immigrants camping in Topanga State Park.
His feeling of debt is gone, but he still feels his resentfulness.
Finally, he meets his wife but she deplores the manner, Delaney has managed this conflict.

Duckduck (Contributor)

Re: Tortilla Curtain Chapter 1

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Fireball hat geschrieben:Ich mache bald Englisch LK (nach den Ferien) und wir sollen ein Buch lesen und ich habe zum Beispiel Kapitel 1 zusammengefasst (von Tortilla Curtain) und es wäre gut, wenn jemand die Fehler korrigieren könnte .:)
Danke !:)

Hi Fireball und willkommen im Forum! :)
Was ich Dir jetzt sage, ist wirklich nicht böse oder abwertend gemeint. Du kannst ohne Frage gut Englisch und ich will Dich nicht verunsichern. Also schlucke runter und sieh die Anmerkungen als Hilfsversuch, ja?!
Bei der Lektüre Deiner Zusammenfassung sind mir weniger die Fehler als gewisse stilistische "Mängel" aufgefallen, die in die Richtung Weitschweifigkeit, unnötige Wiederholung und Wortwahl aus unangemessenen - oft zu hohen - Sprachebenen gehen. Ich hoffe, Du nimmst mir nicht übel, wenn ich die Stellen mal farblich kennzeichne und dann Vorschläge zur Änderung mache, OK?!


Chapter 1 Summary
This chapter clearly depicts the first action, taking place in this novel.
Delaney Moosbacher, described as a liberal humanist and writer, triggers an accident with his car where a Hispanic person is obviously hurt grievously.
Delaney wants to assist in helping him by attempting to talk in English.
Although, he attempts it, it does not have much success owing to the matter that the man iis not capable of comprehending English.
Since the man has severe injuries, Delaney wants him to see a doctor but the man rejects seeing a doctor.
Instead of visiting a doctor,
he asks for money.
Delaney is scared of getting into trouble, so that he gives him $20.
After having given him money, he leaves for the recycling center, what he originally has been heading for.
Delaney can not stop thinking of this incident and very soon, it seems to be apparent to him that the man, to whom he had spoken to, has to be one of the illegal immigrants camping in Topanga State Park.

His feeling of debt is gone, but he still feels his resentfulness.
Finally, he meets his wife but she deplores the manner, Delaney has managed this conflict.Chapter 1 Summary
Instead of a long exposition in the first chapter, the action starts immediately.
The liberal humanist and writerDelaney Moosbacher has a car accident in which anobviouslyHispanic persongets seriously hurt.
Delaney wants to help and speaks to him, but his attempt leads nowhere, since the man does not understand English.
When Delaney advises him to see a doctor because of the severe injuries, the man declines and asks for money instead.
Since Delaney is scared of getting into trouble, he gives him $20 and heads for his initial destination, the recycling center.
But still he cannot stop thinking about what happened and it dawns on him that the man might be one of the illegal immigrants camping in Topanga State Park.

His feeling of debt is gone, but he still feels his resentfulness.Diesen Satz verstehe ich nicht. Meinst Du vielleicht: His guilty feeling turns into resentfulness.
When Delaney finally tells his wife, she is not at all happy about the way he handled the affair.

Grüße
Duckduck

Fireball

Re: Tortilla Curtain Chapter 1

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Natürlich nehme ich dir das nicht böse, ich versuche halt immer so einen möglichst guten Stil anzustreben und drücke mich dann zu hoch aus . Das muss ich noch lernen.
Ich danke dir erst einmal dafür, dass du dir die Mühe gemacht hast, damit ich sehe, was ich verbessern kann! :-)
Liebe Grüße, Fireball